Hello everyone,
I've recently completed my second short screenplay, and it's called The Third Wheel. It is a drama about a couple who are spending a romantic night together when an another man comes in to alter their lives.
I know it's not a correct logline, but I've not able to write something which won't give out the crucial points and will be interesting at the same time.
I'm especially looking for criticism about the dialogues in this short. I'm trying to master the art of writing dialogues, and I've worked really hard in tweaking the dialogues; therefore, please point out even the small bits.
In addition to this, I'm also looking for some advice regarding writing the descriptions. I've seen some screenwriters who use "fancy" words to write their scripts, and on the other hand, I've seen equally successful screenwriters who like to get to the point.
One more thing (read this portion after reading the short)
So yeah, give it a try and point out any thing that you want to, for it'll help me in improving my craft.
Thanks in advance!
http://flipsydeworld.com/TheThirdWheel.pdf
I've recently completed my second short screenplay, and it's called The Third Wheel. It is a drama about a couple who are spending a romantic night together when an another man comes in to alter their lives.
I know it's not a correct logline, but I've not able to write something which won't give out the crucial points and will be interesting at the same time.
I'm especially looking for criticism about the dialogues in this short. I'm trying to master the art of writing dialogues, and I've worked really hard in tweaking the dialogues; therefore, please point out even the small bits.
In addition to this, I'm also looking for some advice regarding writing the descriptions. I've seen some screenwriters who use "fancy" words to write their scripts, and on the other hand, I've seen equally successful screenwriters who like to get to the point.
One more thing (read this portion after reading the short)
I've tried to write a fight sequence in this short, and as this was my first time, I don't think I've done a good job with it. I always thought fight sequences were decided by fight choreographers, but as it turned out, many screenwriters write their own fight scenes. To make matters worse, I've never been involved in a fight in my life lol. So I really hope if someone here can help me out with the fight sequence.
So yeah, give it a try and point out any thing that you want to, for it'll help me in improving my craft.
Thanks in advance!
http://flipsydeworld.com/TheThirdWheel.pdf