I've been writing since I was 15 years old but this is the first time I'm letting anyone else, other then my family, read my work. Please be kind and tell me about the things I could work on. This is only the first few scenes of the screenplay I'm working on now. Thank you.
FADE IN:
INT. JASON'S BEDROOM - MORNING - DREAM
A mysterious woman, Kate, with an hour glass figure and long brown hair, lays on a bed with her back to the camera. She lays in a room filled with various movie memorabilia.
Kate
(in a soft sleepy voice)
You coming to bed?
cut to:
HALLWAY
A clean shaven man in his mid 30's, Jason, walks with hesitation in his step towards his room not knowing what he might find. He clearly does not recognizes the voice coming from his room but he progresses anyway, curious as to what he may find.
cut to:
BEDROOM
Jason enters the bedroom. He is surprised to find the strange woman he does not know laying in his bed wearing just her panties and a T-Shirt. He is surprised but not put off by this mysterious woman, in fact he goes so far as to lay down in bed beside her. Curious to find out who this woman is, he places his hand on her shoulder and slowly begins to turn her to face him but before he can get a good look at her face we...
cut to:
INT. JASON'S BEDROOM - MORNING
JASON, now unshaven and a little disheveled, lays asleep in bed. This is 36 year old Jason Nelson. Handsome with a slight awkwardness to him. After a few moments he suddenly awakens in bed. His eyes pop open, out of breath and sweating, as though he has just awakened from a nightmare.
As he begins to settle down a little and sit up in bed it is reveled that he is not alone. A cute blond lays asleep in bed beside him.
As he gets up out of bed he tries his best not to wake her. He makes his way to the bathroom.
cut to:
BATHROOM
Jason fills the sink up with water as he stares at himself in the mirror not happy with the man staring back at him. Once the sink is filled he turns off the water and dunks his head in without even blinking an eye, just so he might have the chance of feeling something.
cut to:
MONTAGE
Jason is off to work, wearing a fast food type uniform. He leaves his small one bedroom two family house, in which he occupies the first floor, slamming the door behind him on the way out. The sound from him leaving wakes the woman in bed. She is surprised to see no one laying beside her.
Jason rides the bus to work. He sits alone, staring out the window. Once he arrives at his job, he begins to flip burgers in the back. He is clearly unhappy with his job that is going nowhere.
Later Jason is seen getting yelled at by his much younger boss. Jason does not fight back, though, this seems to be a normal thing between Jason and his boss.
Jason gets out of work late in the afternoon. Once off work he heads to the local movie theater, his second home. As the film begins we see Jason smile for the first time today.
cut to:
INT. MOVIE THEATER - NIGHT
Jason sits towards the front row of the theater. His eyes are wide, glued to the screen, not wanting to miss a second, he's happy. Once the credits begin to roll and everyone gets up out of their seats to leave, Jason's eyes sadden a bit. Faced with having to enter the real world again, he hangs his head, forces himself to get up from his seat and fades into the crowd with all the rest of them.
FADE IN:
INT. JASON'S BEDROOM - MORNING - DREAM
A mysterious woman, Kate, with an hour glass figure and long brown hair, lays on a bed with her back to the camera. She lays in a room filled with various movie memorabilia.
Kate
(in a soft sleepy voice)
You coming to bed?
cut to:
HALLWAY
A clean shaven man in his mid 30's, Jason, walks with hesitation in his step towards his room not knowing what he might find. He clearly does not recognizes the voice coming from his room but he progresses anyway, curious as to what he may find.
cut to:
BEDROOM
Jason enters the bedroom. He is surprised to find the strange woman he does not know laying in his bed wearing just her panties and a T-Shirt. He is surprised but not put off by this mysterious woman, in fact he goes so far as to lay down in bed beside her. Curious to find out who this woman is, he places his hand on her shoulder and slowly begins to turn her to face him but before he can get a good look at her face we...
cut to:
INT. JASON'S BEDROOM - MORNING
JASON, now unshaven and a little disheveled, lays asleep in bed. This is 36 year old Jason Nelson. Handsome with a slight awkwardness to him. After a few moments he suddenly awakens in bed. His eyes pop open, out of breath and sweating, as though he has just awakened from a nightmare.
As he begins to settle down a little and sit up in bed it is reveled that he is not alone. A cute blond lays asleep in bed beside him.
As he gets up out of bed he tries his best not to wake her. He makes his way to the bathroom.
cut to:
BATHROOM
Jason fills the sink up with water as he stares at himself in the mirror not happy with the man staring back at him. Once the sink is filled he turns off the water and dunks his head in without even blinking an eye, just so he might have the chance of feeling something.
cut to:
MONTAGE
Jason is off to work, wearing a fast food type uniform. He leaves his small one bedroom two family house, in which he occupies the first floor, slamming the door behind him on the way out. The sound from him leaving wakes the woman in bed. She is surprised to see no one laying beside her.
Jason rides the bus to work. He sits alone, staring out the window. Once he arrives at his job, he begins to flip burgers in the back. He is clearly unhappy with his job that is going nowhere.
Later Jason is seen getting yelled at by his much younger boss. Jason does not fight back, though, this seems to be a normal thing between Jason and his boss.
Jason gets out of work late in the afternoon. Once off work he heads to the local movie theater, his second home. As the film begins we see Jason smile for the first time today.
cut to:
INT. MOVIE THEATER - NIGHT
Jason sits towards the front row of the theater. His eyes are wide, glued to the screen, not wanting to miss a second, he's happy. Once the credits begin to roll and everyone gets up out of their seats to leave, Jason's eyes sadden a bit. Faced with having to enter the real world again, he hangs his head, forces himself to get up from his seat and fades into the crowd with all the rest of them.