Is this meant to be silent?
If not, im not getting any sound.
You can motivate some of those cuts with sound effects... perhaps a timer going off in the kitchen motivating the action of the first person getting up to go look at the oven... if established with the previous scenes, it will motivate a cut by alluding to offscreen action... it'll also serve to "open" up the cinematic world of your short, making it seem as if there's stuff going on outside the frame.