Would really appreciate feedback about the following:
Is the plot small enough for a small short film or are there too many moving parts?
Are the characters interesting? How can I make them better?
How can I improve my dialogue?
What are your thoughts on my action lines?
Does my story have a good conflict?
Are the themes of my story understandable?
Regarding , the two ghosts and my main characters - do they work as separate entities or would you suggest distilling them? Personally, I think they are okay but I'd love to know what others thought?
Link to script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/19g6IkKkikWx5K-AxkYWQujSH7wodWo5i/view?usp=sharing
Is the plot small enough for a small short film or are there too many moving parts?
Are the characters interesting? How can I make them better?
How can I improve my dialogue?
What are your thoughts on my action lines?
Does my story have a good conflict?
Are the themes of my story understandable?
Regarding , the two ghosts and my main characters - do they work as separate entities or would you suggest distilling them? Personally, I think they are okay but I'd love to know what others thought?
Link to script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/19g6IkKkikWx5K-AxkYWQujSH7wodWo5i/view?usp=sharing
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