Hey IT,
Got any lifesaving techniques for cutting a seemingly weak short film? heh...
It was my first narrative short, it was all shot in a single day (due to lack of funding from my University). The footage and a terrible rushed cut have been sat on my harddrive for a good few months.
I have good coverage, that was something i was familiar with after shooting music videos.
I have terrible dialogue, it's convincing but the story is completely lost. I was aiming far too high with my script.
Basically, i am trying to find a way of making the story a lot clearer. I was going for - ex husband kidnaps wife and child in a desperate attempt to save them from what he believes to be an impending apocalypse.
The dialogue doesn't really explain this, it is based on the premise that the wife broke up with her husband because she thought he was crazy, becoming obsessed with this internet cult of 'believers'. When the eve of d-day approaches, he kidnaps them and locks them in a bunker.
I have the footage of the kidnap, him taking them into a fallout shelter and tying them to chairs. I have a bunch of dialogue of 'please don't hurt us, i'll give you whatever you want' etc before the husband has revealed his voice or face. I have the reveal, which is convincing thanks to the response from the daughter 'dad?'. This is followed by the line 'why are you doing this?' and a response of 'isn't it obvious?'.
AFter this, it falls apart. I have no idea how to show the viewer what they are talking about, up until this point it feels like a typical kidnapping film, the plan was to show cutaways of supplies, gas masks, the husbands laptop etc. Turns out this isn't enough to get the point across. The next line is 'You mean, you actually did it?' which doesn't follow at the moment.
I can't do another shoot with the actors, this time has long passed. I am looking for an approach where i can portray the story with news clips or voice over. To cut to between the footage i have.
Does anyone have any experience with this sort of situation?
It feels like a bit of a dead end, if this is the case i will just release the first cut of the film, which was screened to a small audience but never uploaded to my portfolio. It's not my best, but better than nothing.
Got any lifesaving techniques for cutting a seemingly weak short film? heh...
It was my first narrative short, it was all shot in a single day (due to lack of funding from my University). The footage and a terrible rushed cut have been sat on my harddrive for a good few months.
I have good coverage, that was something i was familiar with after shooting music videos.
I have terrible dialogue, it's convincing but the story is completely lost. I was aiming far too high with my script.
Basically, i am trying to find a way of making the story a lot clearer. I was going for - ex husband kidnaps wife and child in a desperate attempt to save them from what he believes to be an impending apocalypse.
The dialogue doesn't really explain this, it is based on the premise that the wife broke up with her husband because she thought he was crazy, becoming obsessed with this internet cult of 'believers'. When the eve of d-day approaches, he kidnaps them and locks them in a bunker.
I have the footage of the kidnap, him taking them into a fallout shelter and tying them to chairs. I have a bunch of dialogue of 'please don't hurt us, i'll give you whatever you want' etc before the husband has revealed his voice or face. I have the reveal, which is convincing thanks to the response from the daughter 'dad?'. This is followed by the line 'why are you doing this?' and a response of 'isn't it obvious?'.
AFter this, it falls apart. I have no idea how to show the viewer what they are talking about, up until this point it feels like a typical kidnapping film, the plan was to show cutaways of supplies, gas masks, the husbands laptop etc. Turns out this isn't enough to get the point across. The next line is 'You mean, you actually did it?' which doesn't follow at the moment.
I can't do another shoot with the actors, this time has long passed. I am looking for an approach where i can portray the story with news clips or voice over. To cut to between the footage i have.
Does anyone have any experience with this sort of situation?
It feels like a bit of a dead end, if this is the case i will just release the first cut of the film, which was screened to a small audience but never uploaded to my portfolio. It's not my best, but better than nothing.