Hi guys,
Well I'm starting to write for others now and I would just like to share what I have done in light of making it the best it can be.
To let you know this comes from a feature script which has been known in many peoples opinions to be poorly constructed and ever changing for example the future director of it and funder who wants it made, is on its 11th version. He basically dictates to the writer what to write type of process.
I was not in on the gig when they(another writer) first started although I knew about it. In my opinion they just didn't start the writing process correctly for example not having a guide of which to follow and stick to from the offset. The story has been written progressively realizing mistakes as they go and then fixing them. :S
Anyway it's now coming to the end and I have been asked to write a new ending to the funders spec. We were also toying with making a short film for a festival but that is not happening any more.
Realizing how difficult making a great short is and knowing the constraints of having to use the feature film as a basis I tried my best to condense down the 'gist' of the original features story into what would have been a 5min short and more of a trailer type at that.
However knowing that there were possibly too many themes still going on we would have shot enough footage to make the story shorter and singular concentrating on one aspect which is the supernatural angel theme. The funder wants to do the kickstarter thing also so to kill two birds with one IE. make the short for the festival and a longer trailer for kickstarter with more detail etc.
I would like any all criticism if you guys could spare it. I am really trying to get my writing up to a professional standard(ready to send out) if it is not already close. Just to clarify, there is the new ending for the feature film (4 pages) and a trailer/short version(8 pages)
Much appreciated!
http://www.mediafire.com/view/0vucxfp66o3a78l/The spirits Trailershort.pdf
http://www.mediafire.com/view/ay4rjha97our7ir/The spirits _11_new ending.pdf
Well I'm starting to write for others now and I would just like to share what I have done in light of making it the best it can be.
To let you know this comes from a feature script which has been known in many peoples opinions to be poorly constructed and ever changing for example the future director of it and funder who wants it made, is on its 11th version. He basically dictates to the writer what to write type of process.
I was not in on the gig when they(another writer) first started although I knew about it. In my opinion they just didn't start the writing process correctly for example not having a guide of which to follow and stick to from the offset. The story has been written progressively realizing mistakes as they go and then fixing them. :S
Anyway it's now coming to the end and I have been asked to write a new ending to the funders spec. We were also toying with making a short film for a festival but that is not happening any more.
Realizing how difficult making a great short is and knowing the constraints of having to use the feature film as a basis I tried my best to condense down the 'gist' of the original features story into what would have been a 5min short and more of a trailer type at that.
However knowing that there were possibly too many themes still going on we would have shot enough footage to make the story shorter and singular concentrating on one aspect which is the supernatural angel theme. The funder wants to do the kickstarter thing also so to kill two birds with one IE. make the short for the festival and a longer trailer for kickstarter with more detail etc.
I would like any all criticism if you guys could spare it. I am really trying to get my writing up to a professional standard(ready to send out) if it is not already close. Just to clarify, there is the new ending for the feature film (4 pages) and a trailer/short version(8 pages)
Much appreciated!
http://www.mediafire.com/view/0vucxfp66o3a78l/The spirits Trailershort.pdf
http://www.mediafire.com/view/ay4rjha97our7ir/The spirits _11_new ending.pdf
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