Interesting intro... not a whole lot happening, but you do introduce Max and Nathan.
Technically, you might wanna capitalize the names of the characters the first time you mention them, and give us their age: MAX (18)
For extra brownie points, condense the first 10 pages and include more action and thoroughly introduce your main characters.
Also, describe the characters a bit: what are they like? Rebel? Cool? Introvert?
Right now they all seem the same--blank slates.
For example: A girl walks up to them. What is she like? What does she wear? We know she prefers the company of ladies, but paint a brief picture of her, and use some of their dialogue to help us get to know them better.