Hello,
Just have a screenwriting question I am a bit curious on. Below I have written a flashback scene where it picks out the events from the start of the film. Now the events like I said a picked out, meaning that for example event A and event B did not happen straightaway at the start of the film, it went event A, blah, blah, blah then event B blah, blah, blah, then event C and so on. That is why in the flashback I included A)... B)... C)...
But what I want to know is that is this the correct thing to do in a screenplay? How would other go about this? Am I wasting lines by including A), B), C)... Should the reader know which scenes in the flashback I am referring to from the start of the film by simply reading the matching actions and dialogues. I am trying to condense my screenplay so I would like to know a condense way of tackling this example.
Thanks You
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INT. YAMAMOTO’S HOME - LIVING ROOM, SONOKO – NIGHT (FLASHBACK)
A) Family around the Ludo board with Takashi and Chiyo having their fun bicker.
TAKASHI
I just couldn’t roll that number one.
CHIYO
That’s because luck doesn’t occur for losers.
TAKASHI
Losers like me! That’s it, I will show you who is a loser.
B) Haruto beating Miyu in Ludo.
MIYU
I am going to beat you onii-chan.
HARUTO
You are not going to beat me Miyu.
MIYU
I will, I’m feeling lucky this throw.
HARUTO
Oh you do? Well, let’s make it interesting by having a bet. Whoever loses has to say positive things about the winner.
Dice HITS the board and rolls to the center before stopping to show the number one.
HARUTO MIYU
Yes! No!
Haruto moves his remaining blue piece home.
TAKASHI
Looks like you going to have to sweeten up to your brother now Miyu.
C) Miyu having to repeat after Haruto on how brilliant he is.
MIYU
You’re my knight in shining armor whenever I’m in trouble.
HARUTO
Oh well, thank you very much Miyu.
D) Miyu requesting parents to work together to beat Haruto.
MIYU
That’s it; your luck ran out! Mum, Dad, let’s work together and beat onii-chan this time.
E) STILL SHOT of the whole family around the table laughing.
END FLASHBACK as Haruto continuously stares before Miyu SNEEZES in her sleep, causing Haruto to lie back down and embrace her again.
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Just have a screenwriting question I am a bit curious on. Below I have written a flashback scene where it picks out the events from the start of the film. Now the events like I said a picked out, meaning that for example event A and event B did not happen straightaway at the start of the film, it went event A, blah, blah, blah then event B blah, blah, blah, then event C and so on. That is why in the flashback I included A)... B)... C)...
But what I want to know is that is this the correct thing to do in a screenplay? How would other go about this? Am I wasting lines by including A), B), C)... Should the reader know which scenes in the flashback I am referring to from the start of the film by simply reading the matching actions and dialogues. I am trying to condense my screenplay so I would like to know a condense way of tackling this example.
Thanks You
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INT. YAMAMOTO’S HOME - LIVING ROOM, SONOKO – NIGHT (FLASHBACK)
A) Family around the Ludo board with Takashi and Chiyo having their fun bicker.
TAKASHI
I just couldn’t roll that number one.
CHIYO
That’s because luck doesn’t occur for losers.
TAKASHI
Losers like me! That’s it, I will show you who is a loser.
B) Haruto beating Miyu in Ludo.
MIYU
I am going to beat you onii-chan.
HARUTO
You are not going to beat me Miyu.
MIYU
I will, I’m feeling lucky this throw.
HARUTO
Oh you do? Well, let’s make it interesting by having a bet. Whoever loses has to say positive things about the winner.
Dice HITS the board and rolls to the center before stopping to show the number one.
HARUTO MIYU
Yes! No!
Haruto moves his remaining blue piece home.
TAKASHI
Looks like you going to have to sweeten up to your brother now Miyu.
C) Miyu having to repeat after Haruto on how brilliant he is.
MIYU
You’re my knight in shining armor whenever I’m in trouble.
HARUTO
Oh well, thank you very much Miyu.
D) Miyu requesting parents to work together to beat Haruto.
MIYU
That’s it; your luck ran out! Mum, Dad, let’s work together and beat onii-chan this time.
E) STILL SHOT of the whole family around the table laughing.
END FLASHBACK as Haruto continuously stares before Miyu SNEEZES in her sleep, causing Haruto to lie back down and embrace her again.
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