Would anyone be willing to give me feedback on how I could improve either? I feel like the synopsis is really long right now, but I wanted to include all the plot info...
Logline: SHEILA, a freaked-out 1960‘s hippy mysteriously wakes up in 2008 shortly before Obama’s election. In a seemingly alien world she searches for her mother, politics, and love.
Synopsis: SHEILA is a flower-child, who abruptly awakes and finds herself in the year 2008. Trying to orient herself, Sheila wanders the streets seeking to find both more information about where she is, and how to contact her mother. After spending the night on the street, she is spotted by TOMMY, a generous graduate student who offers to let her crash at his place.
Tommy and his best friend JUDE take Sheila in, and Jude gets her a job with the local Obama campaign. Sheila and Tommy learn that her mother died in a car accident, but Sheila is still desperate for more information, and save all the money she earns with vague plans to hire a P.I. Meanwhile, despite learning that Tommy is gay, Sheila begins to fall in love with him, while also feeling a growing attraction to Jude. After Jude breaks up with his girlfriend EMILY because she assumes that Jude and Tommy “hooked-up” (as they had once in the past), Jude and Sheila consummate their attraction. Sheila does not tell Tommy, fearing that it will hurt him. Ironically, Tommy has learned that Sheila’s mother moved to the city they are in before she died but is afraid that if he reveals this to Sheila he will lose her.
After an extended nightmare, Sheila decides to tell Tommy about her relationship with Jude, and he responds by faking indifference. As the election approaches Sheila announces her plan to move back to her home-state when the election is over in order to find her mother, which finally makes Tommy follow up in secret on tracking her mother’s grave down. Meanwhile, Sheila and her rival CLAUDE become involved in strange “guerilla” campaign tactics, which eventually culminate in Jude to getting beat up. Angry at Sheila, Jude seduces Tommy. Sheila sees them asleep together, and leaves the apartment. When she returns that night they have an extremely tense dinner, and Sheila storms off. Tommy chases after her, and tells her that he knows where her mother is. She is momentarily thrilled, then realizes that he has known for weeks. She tells Tommy that she is not a hippy, which hurts him.
The election is the following day, but all Sheila cares about is finding her mother. After Obama is elected, Tommy becomes worried that Sheila will hurt herself, and races to find her. Sheila is at her mother’s grave, and we hear a crescendo of sounds from the past ending in a gunshot. Tommy arrives, shouting her name in terror. Sheila looks up, and tells him that “Sheila” was her mother, who committed suicide, perhaps from disillusionment over the sixties. Sheila realizes that as betrayed as she feels by Tommy, she does deeply love him and they embrace.
Also, I have already shot most of the movie so the story itself is relatively inflexible. Although that being said, I am doing some reshoots as we speak, to I can actually tweak things a little.
Thanks so much in advance!!!
Logline: SHEILA, a freaked-out 1960‘s hippy mysteriously wakes up in 2008 shortly before Obama’s election. In a seemingly alien world she searches for her mother, politics, and love.
Synopsis: SHEILA is a flower-child, who abruptly awakes and finds herself in the year 2008. Trying to orient herself, Sheila wanders the streets seeking to find both more information about where she is, and how to contact her mother. After spending the night on the street, she is spotted by TOMMY, a generous graduate student who offers to let her crash at his place.
Tommy and his best friend JUDE take Sheila in, and Jude gets her a job with the local Obama campaign. Sheila and Tommy learn that her mother died in a car accident, but Sheila is still desperate for more information, and save all the money she earns with vague plans to hire a P.I. Meanwhile, despite learning that Tommy is gay, Sheila begins to fall in love with him, while also feeling a growing attraction to Jude. After Jude breaks up with his girlfriend EMILY because she assumes that Jude and Tommy “hooked-up” (as they had once in the past), Jude and Sheila consummate their attraction. Sheila does not tell Tommy, fearing that it will hurt him. Ironically, Tommy has learned that Sheila’s mother moved to the city they are in before she died but is afraid that if he reveals this to Sheila he will lose her.
After an extended nightmare, Sheila decides to tell Tommy about her relationship with Jude, and he responds by faking indifference. As the election approaches Sheila announces her plan to move back to her home-state when the election is over in order to find her mother, which finally makes Tommy follow up in secret on tracking her mother’s grave down. Meanwhile, Sheila and her rival CLAUDE become involved in strange “guerilla” campaign tactics, which eventually culminate in Jude to getting beat up. Angry at Sheila, Jude seduces Tommy. Sheila sees them asleep together, and leaves the apartment. When she returns that night they have an extremely tense dinner, and Sheila storms off. Tommy chases after her, and tells her that he knows where her mother is. She is momentarily thrilled, then realizes that he has known for weeks. She tells Tommy that she is not a hippy, which hurts him.
The election is the following day, but all Sheila cares about is finding her mother. After Obama is elected, Tommy becomes worried that Sheila will hurt herself, and races to find her. Sheila is at her mother’s grave, and we hear a crescendo of sounds from the past ending in a gunshot. Tommy arrives, shouting her name in terror. Sheila looks up, and tells him that “Sheila” was her mother, who committed suicide, perhaps from disillusionment over the sixties. Sheila realizes that as betrayed as she feels by Tommy, she does deeply love him and they embrace.
Also, I have already shot most of the movie so the story itself is relatively inflexible. Although that being said, I am doing some reshoots as we speak, to I can actually tweak things a little.
Thanks so much in advance!!!
