For anyone who doesn't know, I like to write. I've written a few screenplays, short scripts and short stories and some other stuff. I also write movie reviews on my blog.
Anyway, the point of this post. Last night, I finished writing a short story for entry into a competition on the theme of Broken Identities. It was written within a few hours, as i'd only known about the competition for a couple of days, so I didn't have the time to re-write it or anything.
The story itself is 7 pages in length. I would really appreciate it if the people here who like to read would take the time to read seven pages, and give a little feedback, just so I know whether or not I have entered a steaming pile of crap into the competition.
Here's a synopsis:
Timi is moved from up North to a new school in South London in his final year of school. He can’t seem to make friends there, and while angry and vulnerable, is seduced by a group of drop-outs who appeal to him on many levels.
With his Dad working nights, and his Mother out of the scene, he is forced to make a life changing decision that he is not ready to make. He quickly learns that friendship and acceptance are not everything, and that the world is a crushing place full of conflict.
Here's the link:
http://www.scribd.com/doc/37480766/C...-When-You-Fall
I know reading isn't everybody's thing, so I'm not expecting loads of feedback, but even just for a couple of people to read would be cool. Please don't post anything rude or negative, I only appreciate constructive criticism related to the art of creative writing.
Thanks guys, for any feedback.
Anyway, the point of this post. Last night, I finished writing a short story for entry into a competition on the theme of Broken Identities. It was written within a few hours, as i'd only known about the competition for a couple of days, so I didn't have the time to re-write it or anything.
The story itself is 7 pages in length. I would really appreciate it if the people here who like to read would take the time to read seven pages, and give a little feedback, just so I know whether or not I have entered a steaming pile of crap into the competition.
Here's a synopsis:
Timi is moved from up North to a new school in South London in his final year of school. He can’t seem to make friends there, and while angry and vulnerable, is seduced by a group of drop-outs who appeal to him on many levels.
With his Dad working nights, and his Mother out of the scene, he is forced to make a life changing decision that he is not ready to make. He quickly learns that friendship and acceptance are not everything, and that the world is a crushing place full of conflict.
Here's the link:
http://www.scribd.com/doc/37480766/C...-When-You-Fall
I know reading isn't everybody's thing, so I'm not expecting loads of feedback, but even just for a couple of people to read would be cool. Please don't post anything rude or negative, I only appreciate constructive criticism related to the art of creative writing.
Thanks guys, for any feedback.
