I've wrote a couple practice screenplays and now I wanna turn this one into a feature length screenplay. I'm pretty happy as a writer with this first draft of the opening scene but I need feedback from people with more experience and knowledge than me. Don't be afraid to tell me if it's utterly awful or makes no sense, I need honest feedback even if it's harsh.
The main thing I wanna know is if this opening scene to the story is interesting and intriguing , or if it falls flat and is just boring and odd.
Keep in mind it is just the opening scene. I have ideas and a plan for where the story is going mapped out and I think it's gonna be pretty awesome, I just need opinions on this opening scene before I continue.
Thanks in advance for all those who have taken the time to read it and give me your feedback!
The main thing I wanna know is if this opening scene to the story is interesting and intriguing , or if it falls flat and is just boring and odd.
Keep in mind it is just the opening scene. I have ideas and a plan for where the story is going mapped out and I think it's gonna be pretty awesome, I just need opinions on this opening scene before I continue.
Thanks in advance for all those who have taken the time to read it and give me your feedback!
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