Hi everyone,
I would really appreciate some C&C on what I have so far for my opening sequence.
I am sending this in with an application for film school and I'm quite nervous about it.
The story is based on my protagonists struggle with the 'grading system' which is a sort of philosophical view of the struggle creatives face following their passion. Creatives even through school face an uphill battle pursuing a creative career. If Clemence were to pursue a creative passion, because of the grading system it would basically be suicide.
I have a look to work out still and I feel like I haven't articulated myself very well in the first scene. Hopefully I will correct this next pass.
Anyway, I would really appreciate your feedback. It's the first 3 pages I have ever seriously written so...be kind
http://taylerhughes.co.uk/thegrading.html
Thanks,
Tayler
I would really appreciate some C&C on what I have so far for my opening sequence.
I am sending this in with an application for film school and I'm quite nervous about it.
The story is based on my protagonists struggle with the 'grading system' which is a sort of philosophical view of the struggle creatives face following their passion. Creatives even through school face an uphill battle pursuing a creative career. If Clemence were to pursue a creative passion, because of the grading system it would basically be suicide.
I have a look to work out still and I feel like I haven't articulated myself very well in the first scene. Hopefully I will correct this next pass.
Anyway, I would really appreciate your feedback. It's the first 3 pages I have ever seriously written so...be kind
http://taylerhughes.co.uk/thegrading.html
Thanks,
Tayler
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