Hey everyone, I'm Barry, 16 years of age and new to the forums and film and video altogether Any how, If you can answer some of the questions of I've included in the story I have below I would be more than happy
Also, if you can share all your ideas and changes to this concept, I would appreciate that too
(Big Question: should I include a short introduction in the film for both the main protagonists?
Idea:
In a local town, There is a horror film competition being held and two teenagers, Dylan and Leon are eager to win. The problem is, they both have no film and worse yet, they don't have a story to develop. With that in mind they still throw away all odds and schedule a date and location to film in.
Dylan, On the way to the designated film location, receives a call from Leon notifying him that he's arrival will be late. Dylan replies and states for Leon to take his time. After hanging up the phone, Dylan arrives at the location and begins waiting, as time passes...
[COLOR="Blue"(1. How would I show time passing as he waits?)[/COLOR]
...Dylan notices footsteps outlined in chalk leading towards a bush area. Just before he sets out to follow the trail, Leon calls again and says he's going to be later than he had expected. Dylan then sets out to follow the trail of footsteps.
After some time of following the trail...
[COLOR="Blue"](2. Again, How would I show time passing as he follows the trail?)[/COLOR]
...he nears a dark swamp like area. Leon calls and says he’s almost there. Dylan states to take his time once more and turns around to find that the footsteps he has been following have been erased. Leon hangs up and Dylan searches around for the trail.
After sometime, he still he cannot find any steps. In confusion of looking for an exit, he begins jogging and following the footsteps which seamed to lead nowhere.
(3. How can I show that following the footsteps are he's only options?)
Eventually, he nears the end of the trail. Near the last footstep is a tree with an X centered on it and 2 arrows curving around behind the tree. On the X is a shovel bolted and below it in bold letters, KEY is outlined with an arrow also pointing down the tree towards the ground. Dylan first walks behind the tree, spots a chained and locked chest with EXIT written above it.
He then cautiously walks behind the tree unbolts the shovel and begins digging. He acquires the key and slowly inserts it into the chest. As the key locks inside, Dylan twists and unlocks the chest. With care he slowly opens the chest and hears a stick cracking close by, almost as if it was just behind.
Dylan alerted by this, lowers the chest and hastily turns back to notice a dark figure. Before he could see who or what it was, the figure had knocked him unconscious. [Screen fades to black]
Dylan wakes to find himself strapped to a chair, with 2 metal wires duct taped across his forearms. The wires seemed to be connected to somewhere in the dark room.
Now this is the part where I'm really stuck, what should I include here? some of my thoughts were to include the box in the room with perhaps a poster of the Horror Film Festival as an ending after revealing that Leon was behind the whole event. But also need emphasis on that. I have run out of ideas and need help I need something which serves as an interesting body to the film and leads into a nice resolution. Or maybe even a scary turn of events as Leon gets greedy about winning the competition and perhaps decides to kill Dylan to turn the film into a horror type genre.
My teacher suggested that I show Dylan being electrocuted to further increase tension and keep the audience interested. I cant remember much of what he said, but something along the lines of including a voice in the room, which asks numerous questions about Dylan then jolting him after failing questions? in the end, my teacher said to have 3 judges in a room with a laptop and a surveillance cam type video from the dark room of Leon walking over to kill Dylan. Then the judges become appalled or shocked and therefore they think the film should win.
I will script this idea once I've covered a nice story, I just need to make sure from the experts and professionals that I have a solid foundation and idea to film on which is why I need your help.
Also, if you can share all your ideas and changes to this concept, I would appreciate that too
(Big Question: should I include a short introduction in the film for both the main protagonists?
Idea:
In a local town, There is a horror film competition being held and two teenagers, Dylan and Leon are eager to win. The problem is, they both have no film and worse yet, they don't have a story to develop. With that in mind they still throw away all odds and schedule a date and location to film in.
Dylan, On the way to the designated film location, receives a call from Leon notifying him that he's arrival will be late. Dylan replies and states for Leon to take his time. After hanging up the phone, Dylan arrives at the location and begins waiting, as time passes...
[COLOR="Blue"(1. How would I show time passing as he waits?)[/COLOR]
...Dylan notices footsteps outlined in chalk leading towards a bush area. Just before he sets out to follow the trail, Leon calls again and says he's going to be later than he had expected. Dylan then sets out to follow the trail of footsteps.
After some time of following the trail...
[COLOR="Blue"](2. Again, How would I show time passing as he follows the trail?)[/COLOR]
...he nears a dark swamp like area. Leon calls and says he’s almost there. Dylan states to take his time once more and turns around to find that the footsteps he has been following have been erased. Leon hangs up and Dylan searches around for the trail.
After sometime, he still he cannot find any steps. In confusion of looking for an exit, he begins jogging and following the footsteps which seamed to lead nowhere.
(3. How can I show that following the footsteps are he's only options?)
Eventually, he nears the end of the trail. Near the last footstep is a tree with an X centered on it and 2 arrows curving around behind the tree. On the X is a shovel bolted and below it in bold letters, KEY is outlined with an arrow also pointing down the tree towards the ground. Dylan first walks behind the tree, spots a chained and locked chest with EXIT written above it.
He then cautiously walks behind the tree unbolts the shovel and begins digging. He acquires the key and slowly inserts it into the chest. As the key locks inside, Dylan twists and unlocks the chest. With care he slowly opens the chest and hears a stick cracking close by, almost as if it was just behind.
Dylan alerted by this, lowers the chest and hastily turns back to notice a dark figure. Before he could see who or what it was, the figure had knocked him unconscious. [Screen fades to black]
Dylan wakes to find himself strapped to a chair, with 2 metal wires duct taped across his forearms. The wires seemed to be connected to somewhere in the dark room.
Now this is the part where I'm really stuck, what should I include here? some of my thoughts were to include the box in the room with perhaps a poster of the Horror Film Festival as an ending after revealing that Leon was behind the whole event. But also need emphasis on that. I have run out of ideas and need help I need something which serves as an interesting body to the film and leads into a nice resolution. Or maybe even a scary turn of events as Leon gets greedy about winning the competition and perhaps decides to kill Dylan to turn the film into a horror type genre.
My teacher suggested that I show Dylan being electrocuted to further increase tension and keep the audience interested. I cant remember much of what he said, but something along the lines of including a voice in the room, which asks numerous questions about Dylan then jolting him after failing questions? in the end, my teacher said to have 3 judges in a room with a laptop and a surveillance cam type video from the dark room of Leon walking over to kill Dylan. Then the judges become appalled or shocked and therefore they think the film should win.
I will script this idea once I've covered a nice story, I just need to make sure from the experts and professionals that I have a solid foundation and idea to film on which is why I need your help.
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