Hello, all! First time posting here. I've been writing a comedy feature, and I had a little question. There are several jokes where the punchline is how bad or awkward the dialogue is. Just as an example: a detective is at a murder scene, there's a number of OBVIOUS clues that point to his best friend as the culprit, but the detective is oblivious. He then announces: "I don't suspect a thing!".
My issue is that the feedback I've gotten in regards to these types of jokes is "show, don't tell". Which I know is good advice, but in this particular instance, it's the fact that the detective does plainly state this dialogue that makes it humorous. Since he never suspected his friend to begin with, there's no reason for him to say that line. It's something that's just completely for the audience. It's intentional. But it clearly didn't read as intentional from the feedback I've gotten.
Is there a particular way to write for a "punch line of the joke is that it's a bad joke" kind of shtick?
My issue is that the feedback I've gotten in regards to these types of jokes is "show, don't tell". Which I know is good advice, but in this particular instance, it's the fact that the detective does plainly state this dialogue that makes it humorous. Since he never suspected his friend to begin with, there's no reason for him to say that line. It's something that's just completely for the audience. It's intentional. But it clearly didn't read as intentional from the feedback I've gotten.
Is there a particular way to write for a "punch line of the joke is that it's a bad joke" kind of shtick?