screenplay Is this something decent?

[New22]

This is a first draft. I am really looking for general critiques on it. Thank you very much!!

 

[directorik]

As an exercise in writing two people talking with some interesting
stakes it's something decent. This will be easy to shoot if that's
your plan.

Some of the lines are too obvious - too “on-the-nose” is the term.
But it's compelling.

I always assume a writer is very purposeful with their writing so I
wonder about you use of uppercase in the opening. You must have
a reason, right?

Why do up use uppercase for “...he LIES there bleeding.”? But not
for “He lies in a room...”?
Why do you use uppercase when you describe the size of the dresser
and bed?

I'm always curious how writers choose to use uppercase in a screenplay.

 

[New22]

As an exercise in writing two people talking with some interesting
stakes it's something decent. This will be easy to shoot if that's
your plan.

Some of the lines are too obvious - too “on-the-nose” is the term.
But it's compelling.

I always assume a writer is very purposeful with their writing so I
wonder about you use of uppercase in the opening. You must have
a reason, right?

Why do up use uppercase for “...he LIES there bleeding.”? But not
for “He lies in a room...”?
Why do you use uppercase when you describe the size of the dresser
and bed?

I'm always curious how writers choose to use uppercase in a screenplay.

First, thank you very much for responding. Sad to say, the upper case descriptions were an accident that I need to fix. Due to bad time management I was forced to write this quick.