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Old 12-28-2017, 11:00 AM   #1
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My short film was picked as Daily Short for FilmShortage.com

http://http://filmshortage.com/dailyshortpicks/motel/

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Old 12-28-2017, 11:34 AM   #3
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This was very well shot, edited, composed, acted.

Spoiler: After reading the description I thought the fact that he didn't how he got where he was could have been written better. Or perhaps a better ending.
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Old 12-28-2017, 11:54 AM   #4
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This was very well shot, edited, composed, acted.

Spoiler: After reading the description I thought the fact that he didn't how he got where he was could have been written better. Or perhaps a better ending.


Thank you! And yes I do agree I should have worked harder to show the reason for the "confusion" better, or as you said had a more impactful ending.
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Old 12-28-2017, 11:57 AM   #5
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It seems very festival-friendly but with a minor addition to explain that better I think, or give it a good twist in the end, with who/what is at the door. If that is in the cards. But it looks, feels, and plays like a festival short it just leaves you a little too confused yourself. Well done.
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Old 12-28-2017, 12:00 PM   #6
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Spoiler: For example, he answers the door and sees himself standing there. Cut to black.

That is more of a mindfuck ending. Ha. Could work.
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Spoiler: For example, he answers the door and sees himself standing there. Cut to black.

That is more of a mindfuck ending. Ha. Could work.

ooo!!! where were you when I was figuring out the ending!? Truth be told, the actor was a friend of mine who I had a falling out with, partially because of this movie. By the end of the shooting day I was happy to get what I did, but I know it could have been much better! But again I appreciate the kind words
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Old 12-28-2017, 12:04 PM   #8
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Film will always be critiqued man, this is good stuff and glad you stand behind it!
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Really well made! Really liked the sound design and shots you chose. Nice work!
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Old 01-18-2018, 03:01 PM   #10
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Super cool manchu!
I just watched Jackie Brown a 2nd time so I thought what if a Sam Jackson type character shows up at the end?
He comes to help him clean up & as he talks, more of the story is explained.
Too bad about the falling out, maybe you'll make up later.
Are you in film school?

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