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Old 12-15-2017, 10:11 AM   #16
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Could please someone give an example of a screenplay scene, 3 - 4 lines maybe, written from 2 different POVs. Because I get that in theory, but I don't see how and why the POV would guide me to write a scene differently.
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Old 12-15-2017, 11:54 AM   #17
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I think you're taking this POV writing a bit too serious.
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One second after the POV switch:
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Old 12-15-2017, 02:13 PM   #19
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I think you're taking this POV writing a bit too serious.
He is not.
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He's thinking too hard thus making it complicated. Write the script with the action sequences of what the character is doing, thinking or feeling. That is the point of view. Dialogue is the last resort for what acting cannot portray. Do that for each character respectively. The POV of a script is always the reader.
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He's simply asking to see an example in a major script. This is not beyond reason. Please allow his request.
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Old 12-15-2017, 09:05 PM   #22
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I've recently written a chunk of something and two separate comments suggested that I should be writing a scene from the POV of a specific character. I'm a little new to this, and maybe it's the phrasing, but I'm a little confused.
About these 2 separate comments, did you ask them why they thought that?
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Old 12-16-2017, 10:01 AM   #23
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Quality I think you don't get how I see it. The Indietalk answer is the proper, I DON'T see it seriously and this is why I'm asking from someone who sees it seriously to explain with examples. So my question is a bit ironic.. Actually we agree 100%, the POV is always and only the POV of the reader.

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EXT. ROOF - DAY
The assassin holds motionless his gun towards the opposite building.
Only his belly barely moves while he is breathing steadily.
His right eye is looking through the scope

INT. LIVHNGROOM- DAY
Mark, who is sitting calmly on a sofa and is watching TV.
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How can this scene be written from the POV of the assassin differently from the POV of Mark?
(Sorry for my English)

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Old 12-16-2017, 10:14 AM   #24
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Why not say "He looks through the scope with his right eye."
And/Or
"The assassin spots Mark. He sits calmly on a sofa while watching TV." as POV of Mark.
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Old 12-16-2017, 11:59 AM   #25
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I don't really understand your point. You wrote the same line about Mark who is watching tv and you just name it Mark's POV. Either way it is impossible not to describe Mark's or the assassin's situation and therefore include both POVs which ultimately is the reader's POV.
Please explain if you want more detailed. Write that scene from the POV of the assassin and then write it again from the POV of Mark. This time my request is not ironic , I really want to learn something new, if this whole POV writing thing is not a nonsense.

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Old 12-16-2017, 01:36 PM   #26
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Well, let's say...

Assassin's POV: The assassin holds motionless his gun towards the opposite building.
Only his belly barely moves while he is breathing steadily.
His right eye is looking through the scope.

Mark's POV: Mark sits calmly on a sofa watching TV. He sees a glare reflecting off the scope at a distance from the lights in the city. Mark thinks it is nothing. He ignores it and changes the channel on the TV.
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There's a few problems there already. One is, Mark's POV, how would he know the glare is a scope? You would not write it like that. He would just see a glare. You also wrote what Mark thinks. That it is nothing. That is also wrong. You wrote what he was thinking. Besides the POV discussion here, that is just riddled with issues.
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So that's the POV of the reader.
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Old 12-17-2017, 12:43 PM   #29
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I've recently written a chunk of something and two separate comments suggested that I should be writing a scene from the POV of a specific character. I'm a little new to this, and maybe it's the phrasing, but I'm a little confused.
I read the pages you posted. I'd be interested in knowing what
those people meant. I didn't see any "POV" issues in the pages I
read. Perhaps they are people who don't really know what they
are talking about but want to appear knowledgeable.

Do you know and trust the people who made the POV comments?
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I would like to add to that, don't trust me. I am far from a screenwriting expert and haven't written in years.
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