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Old 12-07-2017, 05:17 AM   #1
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Question please criticize my short movie

hello dear forum members,
me and a friend of mine made this movie for our film & lit. lesson, and would love to hear your comments on it. this is the third movie I've ever made. please tell me where I can improve and mistakes I did. I would like to improve my movie making skills.

here is a link to my movie, it is currently unlisted on youtube, I would like to hear comments and perfect my movie before posting it.

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Old 12-08-2017, 10:34 PM   #3
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There's some nice stuff here.
I think I would've liked it better if it was edited to 3/4 of its length or even less.
Her reactions after the elevators seem a bit slow, maybe those shots can be cut down.
Maybe for your next one you can tell your actor to speed things up a bit.
Good effort, good luck with it.
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