Home Your Ad Here

Go Back   IndieTalk - Indie Film Forum > Making The Film > Screenwriting

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 11-14-2017, 04:08 PM   #1
stevencwood
Basic Member
 
Join Date: Oct 2017
Location: Los Angeles, California
Posts: 47
Reworking an old project

I had a post-apocalyptic idea for a while now, wrote about 70 pages of something, but wasn't happy with the results.

So, I said fuck it, started over with zombies. I always loved the genre, but never tackled it. Now I always want my zombie flicks to be dark, where no one is safe, so that's how this is written.

I feel like the INT/EXT scene here doesn't work, and maybe should be broken into a few INT and EXT scenes, but you tell me.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1L_...lNLiTywIrHqW97
stevencwood is offline   Reply With Quote
Old Today   #1A
film guy
Basic Member
 
Posts: 17

 
Old 11-18-2017, 03:23 PM   #2
Filman
Basic Member
 
Filman's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jun 2009
Location: Germany
Posts: 521
You have the injured family stranded. The kids are tied to the car, while the Zombies attack. It ends with daddy being dragged into the forest.

Why not have daddy unconscious during the whole scene?
Filman is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 11-18-2017, 03:25 PM   #3
stevencwood
Basic Member
 
Join Date: Oct 2017
Location: Los Angeles, California
Posts: 47
Quote:
Originally Posted by Filman View Post
You have the injured family stranded. The kids are tied to the car, while the Zombies attack. It ends with daddy being dragged into the forest.

Why not have daddy unconscious during the whole scene?
Because making the father fail at rescuing them helps his arc. Just after this, the other main character finds Frank and rescues him. Frank immediately runs back to the car to see his zombie kids. From there it flashes forward to day 100 which is present day.
stevencwood is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 11-19-2017, 03:26 PM   #4
Velusion
Basic Member
 
Join Date: Jun 2005
Location: Utah
Posts: 102
I liked the way it was written. Sure, it's a little undisciplined but it has promise.

I think it will play well if you get the camera angled you need and if you have some editing skill... Could be good!
Velusion is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 11-19-2017, 03:27 PM   #5
stevencwood
Basic Member
 
Join Date: Oct 2017
Location: Los Angeles, California
Posts: 47
Quote:
Originally Posted by Velusion View Post
I liked the way it was written. Sure, it's a little undisciplined but it has promise.

I think it will play well if you get the camera angled you need and if you have some editing skill... Could be good!
Thanks. Yea, I got a little wordy and I need to cut it down.
stevencwood is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump


All times are GMT -5. The time now is 09:07 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.9
Copyright ©2000 - 2017, vBulletin Solutions, Inc.


©IndieTalk