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Old 09-06-2016, 11:39 AM   #1
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Windows Media Player Schoon Genoeg (Well Done) - 48HFP Dark Comedy

During the last weekend of august I finally participated in the 48 Hour Film Project
We had to make a dark comedy.
There were 44 teams, so there were 4 screening groups (A, B, C, D)
In group C we were 2nd runner up for the Audience Award, leaving 2 nominees for best film behind us
We also got nominated for best music and best use of line.
Although we didn't win any award, we are proud of the result.
(Yes, it is not perfect: I see a number of flaws. Some I should have noticed on set: I was the director I had to be more in control when asking about the focus. Lesson learnt: giving everyone the room to excel is good, but keep double-checking.)

BEWARE: it contains strong language.
The subtitles are in close captions.

I hope you can enjoy this

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That's great!

Was your line "Are you done?"

Didn't notice any focus issues, was captivated enough not to be technical.
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Yeeaaah, this is good. Started half way through wondering why it didn't do better in the competition. Probably because the ending is too unclear. But boy is the acting excellent and the music has the optimal tone.
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Probably because the ending is too unclear.
Spoiler: The cleaning crew is sexually harassed by the boss so they smear the company name with overtly sexual interviews off hours.
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I'll check it out when i get off.
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I'll check it out when i get off.
After you watch it you'll understand how fitting that is.
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.........Probably because the ending is too unclear...........
The ending is quite clear in Dutch, but it is impossible to translate it and let it have the same clarity and impact.
We actually got a view of reactions (from winning teams) saying that we had a very clear and rounded story, while many were vague or ambigue.


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Yeeaaah, this is good. Started half way through wondering why it didn't do better in the competition. Probably because the ending is too unclear. But boy is the acting excellent and the music has the optimal tone.
Thanks!
There was some very very strong competition with large experienced teams and known actors.
The winner of best film, best writing and best actress:
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After you watch it you'll understand how fitting that is.


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That's great!

Was your line "Are you done?"

Didn't notice any focus issues, was captivated enough not to be technical.
Great to hear

The line was the same for every team: "The answer is yes, but what is the question?"

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Great directing and cinematography. This picture is what im going to tell my DP, that i want and need.

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Click CC for subtitles. They are on by default you must have turned them off.

Looks like he figured it out.
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The one flaw and amateur films fell short of that is the actor (first one) looked into the camera. That should havr been edited out. Honestly, that's the only difference maker i can find.
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The one flaw and amateur films fell short of that is the actor (first one) looked into the camera. That should havr been edited out. Honestly, that's the only difference maker i can find.
The shot where he sits down is POV of girl #2, so he is looking at girl #1, then #2 not camera.
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The shot where he sits down is POV of girl #2, so he is looking at girl #1, then #2 not camera.
I edited my original post and rewatched it. 42 seconds or so his eyes dropped to the camera. Its so good this is the only valid argument worth having.
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You are right though as the girl sits but the camera is stationary so good catch.

48 hours and all.
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There was some very very strong competition with large experienced teams and known actors.
Intriguing. The winning film feels a tiny bit more solid and has a dog (always a winner), and watching their team, they feel very experienced. But I still like your more in that sens that where your film works, it's ahead of the winner. Yours is more composed. Loving the moment when both girls lean their chin into their hands. But not optimally written. Here's the problematic thing again with the twist ending (that amateurs love). It's not a good idea. Note how the winner has a twist one minute in and a solid punch at the end. That's a better strategy.
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