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Cartoon Template for Short Story Craft

Uranium City inspired me with this post: http://www.indietalk.com/showthread.php?p=314623#post314623
Every old Loony Tunes cartoon uses the same basic three act structure in the Field book. I find very little more inspiring to short screenwriting than Loony Tunes. They cram a ton of story into 7 minutes. Every one.

I understand and experience myself that thread's OP's difficulty in conforming a typical feature length three act structure (or some semblance of) into a horribly brief period of <10min.
Folks, it ain't easy - if you're starting from pie-in-the-sky scratch nothing.
It's a lot easier if you use a template.

So... not at all as a rebuking challenge to UC's above declaration, but as an exploration of classic cartoons as a creative resource, I thought I'd deconstruct several short-story-length classic cartoons and see what elements of a Syd Field three act structure they did or didn't contain, (necessity being the mother of [creative] invention.)


I'll begin with providing my own modified template interpretation of the Syd Field three act structure which I call the "Two Constraint Three Act Structure."

20130320TwoConstraintThreeActStructure_zpsa77e215d.png

(F#ckit. Fixed it)

This is for your simple story, most often seen in any comedy, but can also be applied to other genré films such as 'Top Gun', 'Black Swan' or 'Chronicles of Riddick.'


Next, I chose pretty much the first Warner Brothers cartoon I found on youtube: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EQZOvdD-KK8
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EQZOvdD-KK8

... then broke it down:
Code:
A Feather in His Hare

0:00 WB/Loony Tunes intro
0:15 Bugs Bunny title card
0:18 fade to episode title
0:23 fade to credits
0:31 fade to Directed by title card
0:34 fade to black

Act I 
- Here's the Situation -
0:35 fade to cartoon open - bespectacled NA Indian with bull's eye on belly 
stalking through forest (Antagonist)
0:40 Indian (I) stops, gives fourth wall blank stare, signs subtitles "You be
 quiet, Me hunt rabbit!", resumes stalking
0:48 Bugs Bunny (BB) (Protagonist) sings from inside his rabit hole as I 
approaches. First contact!

- Hope - 
1:07 I slides carrot baited mouse trap to rabit hole entrance, BB pulls it in, 
I rushes hole, aggressively gropes about deep inside, SNAP!, withdraws mousetrap 
on fingers yelling and dancing about

- Might Loose It... - 
1:18 BB places second mouse trap out of hole, SNAP! cut to I's face yelling
 "YEEOUCH!", I grasps foot and dances about in pain while BB appears out of hole
 pleased with his effort
1:25 BB leaps out of hole and dances up and down beside I mocking, delivers "Eh, 
Whatsup, Doc?", they continue to dance about

- FIRST CONSTRAINT MET: Antag & Protag have met and are now in conflict

ACT II, Part I
- First Lesson -
1:32 I declares goal, "Me catch me!", BB inspects traps
1:46 BB offers assistance on how to catch rabbit, directs to signs at decoy hole,
I thanks BB, shakes hand
1:56 I double takes BB, runs cross country to teepee, retrieves bow & arrow, goes 
to hole, reconsiders shooting arrow into hole... follows rabbit tracks away from 
hole, BB pops out of I's quiver to watch

- Second Lesson -
2:18 BB cries out behind I "Here I am, Tecumseh!", I whips around (unaware BB is 
in his quiver), BB calls and misdirects I again, I turns about and looses arrow 
towards no target

- Third Lesson -
2:22 BB pulls arrow from quiver, bends it into curve, calls out behind I who 
turns, grasps curved arrow, looses it, it circles in air and strikes I in rear, I 
jumps up striking head on tree limb above, falls to ground beside BB in quiver

- Fourth Lesson -
2:35 From the re-shouldered quiver BB calls another taunt to I, I pulls BB from 
quiver as arrow, BB kisses I in the face/mouth, I looses BB to wipe face and 
providing BB his escape, midair BB reposte, until...

ACT II, Part II
- Oh, No! -
2:45 POW! BB impacts with explosion into large tree
2:48 cut to BB tied to post while I prepares stew caulron over fire
2:54 BB wakes up, struggles post out of ground, tippee-toes farther away, I double 
takes difference, moves pot closer and continues rabbit stew preparation
3:01 BB repeats, I repeats, and again, and again, again, again, BB stops, I 
continues moving further away, again and again into distance away from BB

- Whew! It's Okay, Now - 
3:22 BB declares to fourth wall "What a mo-roon!", fade to next scene

- Sixth Lesson - 
3:31 I incrementaly moves pot closer to new location, struck in face with snowball 
from rabbit hole, I asks BB about snowball, BB ducks down rabbit hole with second 
snowball, I pursues
4:02 brief fight sounds, BB leaps out of hole and walks away wearing I's pants, 
feather, and glasses
4:11 I pops head out of hole with red bow in hair, declares he "will fool [BB] 
plenty", fade to black

- Seventh Lesson -
4:20 open BB hopping through forest singing, stops at sight of teepee with barber 
pole, "Hare Cut" and "Scalp Treatment" signs, but bugs is onto the obvious ploy, 
enters anyway as ingenue, I greedily awaits at barber chair
4:44 I cries "Next!", BB states I was there before him so he's next, back and 
forth, I agrees and sits in barber chair, BB dashes behind chair, produces rock-
hammer, strikes I in head (off screen)
5:19 BB moves dazed I to teepee entrance, places bundled cigar's in his hand, 
continues hopping and singing, fade to black

- Eighth Lesson - 
5:30 fade open I following rabbit tracks, knife and stone-hammer in hand, BB 
alarmed, spins tail like propeller to escape, stops @ water pump, pumps water, 
makes mud, I races foreward, BB places mud mound on pottery wheel, makes large 
clay pot, bakes in kiln, paints pot, tosses in air crashes onto I's head upon 
arrival

- Closing Gag - 
6:03 BB laughs @ I, turns to fourth wall to scoff at I, turns to see I with bow 
and arrow pointed at him, I declares he's "last of the Mohicans", pulls bow-
string, BB directs his attention skyward, stork carries three baby I's, I wilts 
and faints, fourth stork carries baby BB - followed by dozens of storks with baby 
BBs, BB wilts and faints atop I

6:51 vignette close to black

ACT I is truncated with the deliberate omission of "It Just Got Worse", but otherwise it's good: Protagonist meets Antagonist and the challenge between them is on.
They did not part ways or either party overcome the other.

ACT II begins with expected challenges comparable to multiple "Learn Stuff" events.
There's even an appropriately timed "Oh, No!" moment right where ACT II, Part II typically begins at the halfway point @ 2:45 to an expected "It's All Okay, Now" resolve before 3:31.

But here is where the three act structure erodes and we're just shown a continuation series of protagonist stunts and a final gag ending keying off the antagonist's statement "I'm the last of the Mohicans."

There's no "Total Loss, The Story's Done" moment like when 'Top Gun's Maverick's best friend dies, he quits school, and his girl leaves - only to pull himself out of his own ashes to a stirring conclusion.

Nope.

No second constraint that Bugs Bunny must achieve before the story can proceed to a stirring conclusion.
No ACT III whatsoever.

We're given a set up for a 'Saturday Night Live' "wheels just kinda fell off" conclusion, which is fine for cartoons for little kids.
Not so good for adults.



As you see 'A Feather in His Hare'... kinda sorta very loosely follows some vague semblance of the three act structure.
But certainly not strictly, which doesn't diminish UC's statement.

Instead, this thread's purpose is to deconstruct what are arguably historically successful short story film models to adopt similar approaches to our own short story models so that we, as growing filmmakers, may make better short stories and fewer frustrating "film fragments."


I'll close this opening post with a spot on quote:
I've seen some writers post here [film] snippets of action which they want to call a short. While the action and setup may be intriguing, it is ultimately unfulfilling on the screen. Viewers don't like to be frustrated. If the audience is left wondering (what was this about? who are these people? why should I care about them? etc.), it fails.
(Filmmaker's "Amen!") ;)
 
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Bugs Bunny - The Unruly Hare

Next up... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PNjYpuCRECs

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PNjYpuCRECs

Code:
The Unruly Hare

0:00 WB/Loony Tunes intro
0:08 Merry Melodies title card
0:20 fade to episode title
0:26 fade to "with BUGS BUNNY"
0:30 fade to Directed by and credits title card
0:33 fade to black

Act I 
- Here's the Situation -
0:34 fade to open railroad workers hammering in rail spikes, laying down
more track through midwest forest setting
1:00 cut to signage assortment declaring property of railroad with Bugs Bunny (BB) 
singing off screen, pan to BB at end of carrot pile reading on
a stump
1:25 off screen Elmer Fudd (EF) begins singing "I've been working on the 
wail woad", BB turns as EF approaches
1:36 BB adresses fourth wall, states that sounds like Frankie Sinatra, 
listens more, holds nose, descends into stump hole to evade noise

- Might Loose It (if EF continues to walk on by) - 
1:41 EF carries surveyor's tripod & scope, stops @ stump, BB pops up sign 
"P-U", EF sets up scope on distant target

- First Constraint met: BB and EF are in proximity conflict, let the 
foolery begin

- ACT II, Part I - 
- First Lesson - 
1:53 BB sticks book out of stump blocking scope view, EF flips out at 
rapid series of Vargas pin up girls BB keeps putting up followed by BB 
with lipstick kissing into lens
2:09 EF arroused, reaches across scope and kisses BB, BB knocks on EF's 
wooden head, BB - "Baby or ain't?", darts away as EF realized he's been 
duped, BB dashes into rabit hole, EF blasts down hole with shotgun, EF 
declares to viewers "I hate little gwey wabbits", returns to scope

- Second Lesson - 
2:29 BB pops up stump hole @ scope, darts back down as EF arrives to look 
through scope, BB holds up burning match, alarmed EF sees forest on fire, 
runs away crying for help, water, and firemen, fire ladder rises from stump 
hole with BB in FD attire scaling it, descends brass fire-pole, races to EF 
still running about yelling for water, BB sprays EF in face with seltzer 
water, pan in on BB mocking, pan out EF behind him with shotgun
3:01 BB turns to angry EF, tiptoes fingers down shotgun barrel, flicks EF's 
nose and bends barrel before escaping, EF fires, shot circles behind 
hitting two targets BB holds, BB congratulates declaring "You win, Doc!", 
places row of cigars in EF's mouth, lights them, runs away, cigars explode

- Third Lesson - 
3:21 BB races away, EF pursues with smoke clearing from face, BB jumps back 
down stump hole, EF fires repeatedly into stump hole, BB pops out of 
another rabbit hole, approaches EF looking down stump hole, looks down with 
him, asks "Whatsup, Doc?", "Just put a wabbit outta his miserwy", "It's 
murder he says" and rejoins EF looking down stump hole, "You missed me", 
honks EF's nose

- Fourth Lesson - 
4:17 BB runs away, jumps down another hole, EF arrives to club BB with 
shotgun, down hole BB waits then sticks up rabit head on stick, BANG!, BB 
rattles and shakes, EF dances above "I got him! I got him!"

ACT II, Part II
- Fifth Lesson - 
5:00 EF returns to survey scope where BB lays flat atop, EF looks into BB's 
eyes and adjusts tail for focus, BB kisses him on lips, EF sticks shotgun 
barrels in BB's mouth, removes him from scope, places barrel against BB's 
chest, BB gently pushes barrel away, EF returns barrel to BB's chest, BB 
turns around declaring "only a rat would shoot a guy in the back", EF 
fires ("Oh, No!"), declares "So, I'm a big fat rat!", BB emerges from smoke 
to shove a hug block of cheese in EF's mouth

- It's all okay, now - 

- Sixth Lesson - 
5:48 BB runs away, escapes down stump hole, EF throws stick of dynomite 
down hole and runs away, BB with dynomite emerges from another hole ahead 
of EF, cheers EF on as if in a relay race then passes off dynomite stick as 
if a baton to EF, EF stops and throws stick to BB, BB in baseball catcher's 
gear cathes and throws back to EF, EF throws it back, BB runs away to 
railroad supplies depot, stick explodes

- Total Loss! Story's Done, Unless... -

ACT III
6:36 railroad supplies fall about EF into assembled rail through forest, 
train whistle sounds behind EF amid track, turns and jumps trackside as 
train rushes by, BB waves goodby from caboose back step, BB jumps from 
caboose, quips about "we shouldn'nt be doing any unneccessary traveling 
these days"
7:07 vignette close to black as BB walks back down track into sunset

7:09 "That's all Folks" card

Here's the compact version of my (flawed) "Two Constraint Three Act Structure" for quick reference:
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Truncated ACT I, intro two principle characters in a situation, ensure they come into proximity conflict.

ACT II begins with expected foolery.
  • First Lesson - Vargas girls, kiss, shotgun blasts, BB presumed dead
  • Second Lesson - Match fire, FD and water, bend shotgun barrels, hit targets, win cigars, EF explodes
  • Third Lesson - BB dives down hole, EF blasts w/ shotgun, BB pops out of other hole, "You missed me"
  • Fourth Lesson - BB dives down hole, head on a stick clubbed, BB unharmed
  • Fifth Lesson - BB atop scope, kisses EF, "Big fat rat" set up, BB shot but unharmed
  • Sixth Lesson - BB down stump hole, dynomite baton / baseball, BB presumed exploded at railroad supply depot
ACT II, Part II @ Fifth lesson contains "Oh, No!" + "It's all okay, Now"
Text book ending to ACT II, Part II - BB is dead.

Defacto second constraint met as BB lives on after explosion, to taunt EF with wave.

ACT III is also textbook, albeit rather brief.
And I have no idea what the closing riposte is in reference to, assuredly some event at the time.
No reference to it here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Unruly_Hare
But the WWII setting of February 10, 1945 probably has a great deal to do with it.



'The Unruly Hare' fairly well follows the three act structure.

Can it be done in <10min?
Yes, it can! :yes:
 
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I wish to co-teach a community college course with you on The Three Act Structure And Its Presence and Absence In Cartoons because I think that is my new dream job.
 
Elmer's Pet Rabbit - Release date January 4, 1941

rayw this is freakin amazing! I thank you and Uranium City for bringing it up also! Soaking it all in lol!

You're welcome!


Lettuce do this ONE! MORE! TIIIIME!!!

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Elmer's_Pet_Rabbit
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8T6Kw4FI-hc

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8T6Kw4FI-hc


Code:
Elmer´s Pet Rabbit

0:00 WB title card
0:08 fade to MERRIE MELODIES title card
0:19 fade to "ELMER'S PET RABBIT" and credits card
0:27 fade to Featuring BUGS BUNNY title card
0:30 vignette fade out

- ACT I - 
- The Situation - 
0:31 open vignette well dressed Elmer Fudd (EF) singing & walking along shops 
sidewalk, stops @ RABBIT FOR SALE, 

- Hope - 
0:59 GUARANTEED TO BE THOUGHTFUL AND GENTLE sign drops down in window

- Might Lose It... -
1:00 EF pauses to consider the purchase
1:03 ASK THE MAN THAT OWNS ONE sign drops down
1:05 EF enters pet store and buys rabbit
- Got it! (EF and BB now in proximity conflict) - 

- ACT II, Part I - 
- First Lesson - 
1:16 EF return walks & singing with Bugs Bunny (BB) in box under arm, BB 
emerges from back of box singing a poor accompanyment, taps EF on shoulder 
"Whatchu got in the box, Doc?", "A wittle gway wabbit", BB emerges from 
front of box, sternly warns "Be careful who you're calling a little grey rabbit!", 
slides back into box

- Second Lesson - 
1:56 bird's eye view pan house and backyard to EF building rabit pen in back 
yard, puts BB in, BB paces and complains about pen and food while gorging 
on it, fade out

- Third Lesson - 
3:00 fade in @ night, BB still complaining while belly full, pan to EF in house 
eating supper, retires to relax in living room, answers knock at door, BB 
enters uninvited, BB cranks up the radio and turns on all the lights, EF 
displeased paces towards BB who holds him to dance in living room 

4:09 cut to BB being plopped back into outdoor pen

- ACT II, Part II - 
- Fourth Lesson Leads to... - 
4:17 fade to EF retiring to upstairs bedroom, BB races up behind and enters 
different room, EF returns to hall enroute to bathroom, BB stops him and 
races into bathroom first, angered EF barges in and throws BB out of shower 
who returns and is thrown out again into bathtub, 

5:03 BB pretends to drown in bathtub, 
- Oh, No! -

5:36 EF exits shower to pull BB out, laments the dwownded wabbit, BB 
pops up and kisses EF in thanks for saving him despite all the awful things 
he's done to EF 
- It's All Okay, Now - 

BB wants EF to kick him in rear because he desrves it but EF refuses 
then kicks a little pop, BB declares this means war! BB takes off glove 
and smacks EF a couple times in face then storms out of bathroom

6:36 EF races after BB, bounces off slammed bedroom door onto floor, 
opens door, flips on light, BB in EF's bed yells "Turn off that light!" and EF 
does so, realizes then paces over to bed in dark, SMACK! POW! 
Explosions! Fireworks! Two figures flash out of the bedroom and down 
stairs, BB first out slams front door shut in EF's face, flying furniture 
crashes into barricade of front door
- Total Loss! Story's Done. Unless... - 

- Second Constraint achieved: 
BB separated from EF who may now return to bed in peace -

- ACT III - 
7:25 EF pleased BB is out of house, returns to bedroom and again 
turns on light

7:35 BB back in EF's bed bolts up and again yells "Turn off that light!", 
light switches off

7:39 cut to THAT'S ALL, FOLKS! closing card (functions as lights out)
- Outcome Achieved! - 

7:44 vignette fade to black

Reference image
20130320TwoConstraintThreeActStructure-2013-Compact_zps7a6632d5.png


And lettuce see whut we got...

ACT I:The Situation, Hope, Might Lose It..., & Got it!
ACT II, Part I: First, Second, Third, and Fourth Lessons which leads to...
ACT II, Part II: Oh, No!; It's All Okay, Now; & Total Loss
ACT III: Build to Outcome & Outcome Achieved! Twist Ending

First Challenge: BB to be acquired by EF
First Constraint: BB and EF in proximity conflict
Second Constraint: BB separated from EF
Second Challenge more difficult than first: EF to return to bed in peace


Yup.
It's all there, folks, between 0:31 and 7:39.
Three act structure in 7:38 mins.


* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *

What might be interesting would be to have someone essentially recreate this in live action.
The story is essentially about (explicitly) buying a product not as advertised, such as a bad camera or car, or (implicitly) entering a bad relationship.
In this case the bad product also comes with a bad relationship.
Could be a bad product with a bad salesman or service tech.


* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *

Upon further consideration, that opening ACT I indeed has four out of five elements of the feature length structure: The Situation, (absent: Just Got Worse), Hope (added), Might Lose It..., & Got it!
The additional signs being dropped provide - Hope -.
EF's pauses before the last sign is dropped, thus that pause would be considered a moment where EF must make a decision where the story could progress or end depending upon that decision.

Also, I relocated the "ACTII, Part II" just above where the "- Fourth Lesson -" begins since that is what leads us to the "- Oh, No! -" event.
 
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Awesome thread. I'm in the middle of writing a new short now so it couldn't have come at a better time :)
Hope you find this useful, Dready!

Perhaps a little late for what you're working on, but I intend to (in all my spare time :lol:) begin applying my scathing deconstructivist eye to the following: http://looney.goldenagecartoons.com/DVDvideo/PD/

Gottaluv public domain.

http://looneytunes.wikia.com/wiki/Category:Public_domain_films

Don't know if all of these are PD, I doubt it: http://www.youtube.com/user/BugsBunnyOfficiaI?feature=watch
 
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Just for you, Dready! Well... not entirely JUST for you, but...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F1QglUYS40w




Just let me say WHATTAPITA! making this one video has been! EFFFFFFFFFFF MEEEEEEEEE!

Not only did I of course have to do the breakdown, which is only one or two small whups, but I had to re-learn CamStudio (CS) which I hadn't fooled with for months. http://www.indietalk.com/showthread.php?t=45453

Over the last two days I've fiddle f#cked around with umpteen CS recordings that turned into a buffet of disasters when converted and imported into Adobe Premiere Elements 10 which turned a "simple" eight minute video into a one hour save-to-computer rendering when I knew darn good and well it should have only taken twenty minutes at the most.

And even after I did find all the optimal CS settings and rebuilt this tute for the fifth [expletive] time (after multiple tests!) the final 720/360 rez upload (that worked - it took two!) STILLLLLL took over thirty minutes (EACH!)(Elements 10 really, really, really hates:grrr: text, I tell ya) which is forrrrrrrr-everrrrrr when I'm used to twelve minute uploads for my 1080p four minute 'Places of Nature' gigs.

>30min for 360rez 8min vid
- vs. -
~12min for 1080rez 4min vid

:grumpy:

EFFFFFFFFFFF MEEEEEEEEE!
WHATTAPITA!

But now the process has been figured out, the template has been made, all the necessary homework done I might or might not go through with more of these on a new YouTube channel.
Might.
Maybe.
Probably should.
Probably have better things to do with my time, as well.
But might, anyways.
Don't hold your breath.
It could happen.
Maybe.
Definite maybe.



Couldn't goto sleep.

Uploaded it again @ 1920x1080, but so far the 1080rez isn't available yet (Now it is!, meh), and I built it in Premiere Elements @ 720p figuring that'd speed it up a bit, but no.
Took only ten more minutes to upload = ~40min.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hJTfQEzibu0
 
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Content Construction Critique Wanted!

Alright, IDK how many people are following this thread, but I have a favor to ask that's almost beside the point of this thread's primary focus.

Please watch this eight minute video and tell me if the colored annotation notes I slapped on in YouTube are good/bad/helpful/distracting/timed weird/etc.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hJTfQEzibu0 <-- Best watched at YT @ 720p since this display here is a little small and there's lotsa reading involved.

The content is a separate issue.
I'm primarily interested in the effect the colored annotations bring to the product.

Additional comments are welcome, as well, of course.


Thank you!
 
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Here's my take on the template on Silver Linings Playbook 2012

Code:
ACT I

HERE'S THE SITUATION

0:16 - We see the words "Karel Psychiatric Facility - Baltimore". Moments later, MICHAEL rehearses his        speech to Karen.
1:21 - Daily routines of MICHAEL in the institution. (1) Accepts Pill, but doesn't take them (2) Attends     group meetings. (3) Exercising - Push ups, Jogging. Later we see MOTHER smiling down to him. 

HOPE

2:20 - MOTHER signs the release of MICHAEL 

MIGHT LOSE IT

5:50 MICHAEL arrives at home. FATHER is shocked. He was not told about the release nor would have even consented to the release. He quarrels about what the court thinks, what the doctor recommends. 

GOT IT

7:00 MICHAEL reasons about the 8 months is the result of the plea bargain, and since its already 8 months, it's perfectly fine. FATHER reluctantly accepts defeat.

- - - - - - -  - - - - - -

A lot of things happen here, but somehow the cartoon template doesnt offer anymore label to the ensuing events. Perhaps because it's oriented to a short story structure. 

- - -  - - - -  - -  - - -  
 
ACT II PART II

NOTE: I'm quite confused about the "Lessons" label in the reference of ACT II, since though it applies to Bugs Bunny because of it's fable nature, it certainly does not apply to movies like Silver Lining Playbook, and practically all other movies that is not children/family movie. 

But for the sake of argument, I'm going to use it anyway. In the guise that lessons does not particularly pertain to the characters but the audience "learning" a part of the characters. Let me show that to you a a little soon. 


25:00 - MICHAEL meets TIFFANY, on a friend's dinner. 

Lesson I

30:00 - MICHAEL "officially" talks to TIFFANY, and we learn that TIFFANY wants to fuck but at the same time MICHAEL is not interested because he's married.  

We learn that MICHAEL is still dedicated to her wife, and while TIFFANY's husband died, we learn that she needs companion. 

Lesson II

36:12 - MICHAEL jogs and TIFANNY follows MICHAEL, and later MICHAEL, out of  frustration, indirectly discriminates TIFFANY that she is a big slut. TIFFANY walks away, after she reasons that maybe she is but now she isn't. 

We learn that TIFFANY is interested to MICHAEL, and still MICHAEL is not. Also, we learn that TIFFANY is not naive. 

Lesson III
40:40 - MICHAEL jogs, and out of slight pity, looks around TIFFANY's house and after getting by, TIFFANY appears behind MICHAEL. MICHAEL asks TIFFANY for a date. 

^The reason why he invites Tiffany because it may help him show to Nikki that he is generous to other people.

We learn that MICHAEL is still symphathetic, but the symphathy is grounded on the expected benefit for his relationship with Nikki.  

Lesson IV 

OH No! 

42:20 - MICHAEL and TIFFANY sits at the dinner. TIFFANY offers help to send letter to Nikki from Michael. The conversation drifts off to showing MICHAEL says that TIFFANY is more crazy than MICHAEL. Tiffany walks out.  

49:00 - In the streets, TIFFANY reasons that he is a hypocrite. Cop arrived, and the song that MICHAEL dreads starts to play, and makes him dizzy.  Tiffany realizes this and helps MICHAEL out. 

It's all okay now

52:00 - TIFFANY still agrees to deliver the letter.    

We learn that TIFFANY, despite the rumours, doesn't really like to be called what she is not anymore. Crazy. Slut. Whore. But we learn that TIFFANY still symphatize with MICHAEL. In this lesson, we recognize the growing relationship of TIFFANY and MICHAEL 

<Detour> No concrete lessons here but somehow a link to the next ACT or Lesson. Though it shows that TIFFANY likes dancing, but that's hardly a lesson at all. 

Oh no! Again!
55:51 TIFFANY doesn't want to deliver the letter without MICHAEL giving back something in return, this time, TIFFANY requests that they should dance for a competition.

ACT II PART II 

Lesson V

1:04:10 MICHAEL and TIFFANY starts practicing. (This happens for a period of time.) 

We learn that they are shit, and also we learn that TIFFANY cherishes dancing so much, even though she sucks at it. 

Lesson VI

1:19:49 MICHAEL receives a letter from NIKKI. 

We learn that MICHAEL is still emotionally attached to Nikki. 

<Detour> 
MICHAEL went to the football, leaving TIFFANy to practice alone, and they end up getting a fight by a thrashtalker. They end up quarreling, but Tiffany arrives, and for all the conversation they decided to have bet that includes TIFFANY and MICHAEL winning together. 

ACT II PART III

I know there is no PART III in the template, but I felt like setting up one. You see. ACT II Part I is getting to know from each other. ACT II PART II is getting along. ACT II PART III would be the part where at least one of them is committed, leading to a climax. . . if you refer to Harry Potter, ACT II PART III would be part where Albus Dumbledore dies and Harry is now committed.

Lesson VII 

1:35:38 MICHAEL walks out, quits dancing and rereads the letter. He discovers that it was not Nikki's but it was made up by Tiffany. However, MICHAEL does not tell TIFFANY about this. 

We learn that MICHAEL is not at all mad about TIFFANY lying and impliedly accepts TIFFANY's affection. 

Lesson VIII

1:40:00 MICHAEL and TIFFANY arrives at the venue. TIFFANY sees Nikki and this infuriates her. 

We learn that TIFFANY is now also emotionally attached to MICHAEL.

Lesson IX

1:42:39 Michael sees Nikki in the crowd, but doesn't immediately goes to her. Later, he seeks for TIFFANY because it's their time to dance.

We learn that MICHAEL is now not at all interested to Nikki. 

ACT III
  
Lesson X
1:50:57 After they got enought score, Tiffany walks out after seeing MICHAEL walks toward NIKKI. Later, MICHAEL looks for TIFFANY, and confesses his love.

We learn that MICHAEL now loves TIFFANY.


Observation on the story analysis:

(1) I don't know if it is applicable to stories other than Linear. I mean how about Love Exposure? I don't know if the three act structure can capture that. So many flashbacks and back stories.
(2) You can replication story elements just what they did in "Two Oh nos!"
(3) There's no clearcut things when a partcular lesson or act starts, but I think that's the least of the problem
(4) Lessons are somehow grounded to a certain scene.
(5) There are a lot of happenings, but I focused on the main relationship that is for MICHAEL and TIFFANY to simplify the three act structure.

Other relationship include his father, football, his friend Danny and his brother. I think this is what you call a "SUBPLOT", not sure about it though. This is to say that the more relationship you have, the more lessons you will provide, which also requries more time and more scenes to substantiate your lessons.


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Please tell me how my analysis went :]
 
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ACT I

HERE'S THE SITUATION

0:16 - We see the words "Karel Psychiatric Facility - Baltimore". Moments later, MICHAEL rehearses his        speech to Karen.
1:21 - Daily routines of MICHAEL in the institution. (1) Accepts Pill, but doesn't take them (2) Attends     group meetings. (3) Exercising - Push ups, Jogging. Later we see MOTHER smiling down to him. 

HOPE

2:20 - MOTHER signs the release of MICHAEL 

MIGHT LOSE IT

5:50 MICHAEL arrives at home. FATHER is shocked. He was not told about the release nor would have even consented to the release. He quarrels about what the court thinks, what the doctor recommends. 

GOT IT

7:00 MICHAEL reasons about the 8 months is the result of the plea bargain, and since its already 8 months, it's perfectly fine. FATHER reluctantly accepts defeat.

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A lot of things happen here, but somehow the cartoon template doesnt offer anymore label to the ensuing events. Perhaps because it's oriented to a short story structure. 

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ACT II PART II

NOTE: I'm quite confused about the "Lessons" label in the reference of ACT II, since though it applies to Bugs Bunny because of it's fable nature, it certainly does not apply to movies like Silver Lining Playbook, and practically all other movies that is not children/family movie. 

But for the sake of argument, I'm going to use it anyway. In the guise that lessons does not particularly pertain to the characters but the audience "learning" a part of the characters. Let me show that to you a a little soon. 


25:00 - MICHAEL meets TIFFANY, on a friend's dinner. 

Lesson I

30:00 - MICHAEL "officially" talks to TIFFANY, and we learn that TIFFANY wants to fuck but at the same time MICHAEL is not interested because he's married.  

We learn that MICHAEL is still dedicated to her wife, and while TIFFANY's husband died, we learn that she needs companion. 

Lesson II

36:12 - MICHAEL jogs and TIFANNY follows MICHAEL, and later MICHAEL, out of  frustration, indirectly discriminates TIFFANY that she is a big slut. TIFFANY walks away, after she reasons that maybe she is but now she isn't. 

We learn that TIFFANY is interested to MICHAEL, and still MICHAEL is not. Also, we learn that TIFFANY is not naive. 

Lesson III
40:40 - MICHAEL jogs, and out of slight pity, looks around TIFFANY's house and after getting by, TIFFANY appears behind MICHAEL. MICHAEL asks TIFFANY for a date. 

^The reason why he invites Tiffany because it may help him show to Nikki that he is generous to other people.

We learn that MICHAEL is still symphathetic, but the symphathy is grounded on the expected benefit for his relationship with Nikki.  

Lesson IV 

OH No! 

42:20 - MICHAEL and TIFFANY sits at the dinner. TIFFANY offers help to send letter to Nikki from Michael. The conversation drifts off to showing MICHAEL says that TIFFANY is more crazy than MICHAEL. Tiffany walks out.  

49:00 - In the streets, TIFFANY reasons that he is a hypocrite. Cop arrived, and the song that MICHAEL dreads starts to play, and makes him dizzy.  Tiffany realizes this and helps MICHAEL out. 

It's all okay now

52:00 - TIFFANY still agrees to deliver the letter.    

We learn that TIFFANY, despite the rumours, doesn't really like to be called what she is not anymore. Crazy. Slut. Whore. But we learn that TIFFANY still symphatize with MICHAEL. In this lesson, we recognize the growing relationship of TIFFANY and MICHAEL 

<Detour> No concrete lessons here but somehow a link to the next ACT or Lesson. Though it shows that TIFFANY likes dancing, but that's hardly a lesson at all. 

Oh no! Again!
55:51 TIFFANY doesn't want to deliver the letter without MICHAEL giving back something in return, this time, TIFFANY requests that they should dance for a competition.

ACT II PART II 

Lesson V

1:04:10 MICHAEL and TIFFANY starts practicing. (This happens for a period of time.) 

We learn that they are shit, and also we learn that TIFFANY cherishes dancing so much, even though she sucks at it. 

Lesson VI

1:19:49 MICHAEL receives a letter from NIKKI. 

We learn that MICHAEL is still emotionally attached to Nikki. 

<Detour> 
MICHAEL went to the football, leaving TIFFANy to practice alone, and they end up getting a fight by a thrashtalker. They end up quarreling, but Tiffany arrives, and for all the conversation they decided to have bet that includes TIFFANY and MICHAEL winning together. 

ACT II PART III

I know there is no PART III in the template, but I felt like setting up one. You see. ACT II Part I is getting to know from each other. ACT II PART II is getting along. ACT II PART III would be the part where at least one of them is committed, leading to a climax. . . if you refer to Harry Potter, ACT II PART III would be part where Albus Dumbledore dies and Harry is now committed.

Lesson VII 

1:35:38 MICHAEL walks out, quits dancing and rereads the letter. He discovers that it was not Nikki's but it was made up by Tiffany. However, MICHAEL does not tell TIFFANY about this. 

We learn that MICHAEL is not at all mad about TIFFANY lying and impliedly accepts TIFFANY's affection. 

Lesson VIII

1:40:00 MICHAEL and TIFFANY arrives at the venue. TIFFANY sees Nikki and this infuriates her. 

We learn that TIFFANY is now also emotionally attached to MICHAEL.

Lesson IX

1:42:39 Michael sees Nikki in the crowd, but doesn't immediately goes to her. Later, he seeks for TIFFANY because it's their time to dance.

We learn that MICHAEL is now not at all interested to Nikki. 

ACT III
  
Lesson X
1:50:57 After they got enought score, Tiffany walks out after seeing MICHAEL walks toward NIKKI. Later, MICHAEL looks for TIFFANY, and confesses his love.

We learn that MICHAEL now loves TIFFANY.

Please tell me how my analysis went :]
I haven't seen this film yet, but it looks like you've done a good job mapping it out along the three act structure.

https://docs.google.com/spreadsheet/ccc?key=0AsBznn8D13zOdEI1dGU1VUxaVDhCQmVnVFBLeUxSaWc#gid=0

However, from your breakdown it looks like the 'Total Loss. Story's Done' comes around the points you designated <detour> to ACT II, PART III - Michael & Tiffany are quarreling and he quits.
That reads like an emotional low point in the film, and it's at about the right place in the film's timeline - about 25minutes from conclusion.
The 'Solution' comes when Michael re-reads the letter from 'Nikki' and discoveres it's really from Tiffany.
All events from this point on are build-ups through ACT II to the conclusion where Michael confesses his love for Tiffany.

(1) I don't know if it is applicable to stories other than Linear. I mean how about Love Exposure? I don't know if the three act structure can capture that. So many flashbacks and back stories.
Agreed.
It doesn't fit most screwed up timeline, flashback ridden, anachromistic stories.


(2) You can replication story elements just what they did in "Two Oh nos!"
Yes.
When you examine traditional Hollywood formula films you will be able to pick out normal variants of double elements, extended elements, and fake conclusion points.


(3) There's no clearcut things when a partcular lesson or act starts, but I think that's the least of the problem
Sometimes, yep!
Often there is, though.
What I find interesting is how well the screenplay writers and directors blend between points in a single scene.
There are very few cut and dry "Ah, ha!" moments. Sometimes, but they are not prevalent.


(4) Lessons are somehow grounded to a certain scene.
Yes. And may bundle sub-set lessons between more than a single character in a single lesson where we learn things about the situation or the nature of the character(s).

(5) There are a lot of happenings, but I focused on the main relationship that is for MICHAEL and TIFFANY to simplify the three act structure.
Simplifying is necessary for a good model.

Other relationship include his father, football, his friend Danny and his brother. I think this is what you call a "SUBPLOT", not sure about it though. This is to say that the more relationship you have, the more lessons you will provide, which also requries more time and more scenes to substantiate your lessons.
Yes.
 
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I haven't seen the film.
Although I was guessing at the ACT II, Part II concluding low point I have no way of understanding the emotional level from where you designated ACT II, Part III.

I think what you are calling ACT II, Part III is what Hollywood and I are calling ACT III.

The ACT III indicated above begins at the story's end, 1:50:57.
That's not much of an ACT.
And the scene description of:
"After they got enought score, Tiffany walks out after seeing MICHAEL walks toward NIKKI. Later, MICHAEL looks for TIFFANY, and confesses his love.

We learn that MICHAEL now loves TIFFANY."
... reads an awful like an 'Outcome Achieved!'

But as I said - I haven't seen the film and am just guessing by your description. :)
 
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