KISS -- Keep it simple. Let the story reveal the details.
Logline:
A man sets out to avenge the death of his family by seeking revenge on the one responsible, after discovering the plague responsible for their death is man-made.
I agree. I felt my original was too wordy. But the story is relatively complex. The main character doesn't actually
seek out. It's more of an accident/happenstance. His basic story is
(backstory) Couldn't have a child. Pleads
with god. Is gifted a child. Zombie plague strikes. Lives in fear. Wife is turned. He kills her. Then daughter is
turned he kills her. Meets band of zombie killers. Recklessly risks himself in killing zombies. Discovers that zombie
killer saw him have to kill his family and didn't give him help. He gets super pissed and takes them on. They try to
kill him but he escapes. (I should mention he's been have dilusions that he sees his daughter) So then without
food and water he follows his daughter and happens on a woman(new love interest) She in turn leads him to a
compound(cause she thinks he's hot) The compound is a research facility-secret type. The lead doctor is her
father. (this is the laggy love part of the story where they garden together and fall in love, etc.) Then the zombie
killers have folowed them and await their opportunity. Just when they are going to strike the lead discovers his
new love has been bitten but isn't a zombie. A la he discovers that the doctor caused the plague and indeed has a
cure. But he doesn't have time to kill the doctor because the zombie killers have broken into the compound. But
woops they left the door open and the zombies are also in the compound as well.
Okay that's a little more than I intended to writes but...