I agree with some things MacV is saying, and disagree with others.
I agree about the lack of narrative. There really is none. We have a basic "There is going to be a play, but we don't have an ending yet!", that branches out into the writer wanting to screw everyone, the gay guy talking about quitting smoking, a flashback that is completely unnecessary, etc. Flashbacks can be great if used correctly. But I can't say they were used correctly here. The writing here does not have a general direction. Maybe in the grand scheme of things, there is a point to all of this. Maybe there is a decent story to be be uncovered. But thus far it's not showing at all. Random awkward encounters are not a story.
As much of a mess the narrative is, I think the characters are decently written, and the direction is more than workable.
The photography is great. Didn't really have any problems with it.
Improv can be great sometimes. It isn't here. It's just not logical. Every scene, every event, every word spoken should be an important aspect of moving the story forward. Whether it be introducing plot elements, building tension, emphasizing a point etc. When you add improv to the mix, you are basically taking the steering wheel out of the writer's hands, and giving it to the actors. You are also unnecessarily lengthening scene, which is especially bad given how short your episodes are. Like MacV said, it's insanely easy to notice which scenes were improvised and which weren't. If the improvisation was taken out, and the writing was focused, a lot more could be accomplished with the 5 or so minutes an episode lasts. Unfortunately even without the improvisation the writing is directionless.
I've watched two episodes so far, and I already have a strong feel for the format of the show. Start off with a scene that looks like an advancement in plot, but really accomplishes nothing, and go on to 4 minutes of improv, where the characters act awkward around each other.
One thing I really disagree on with Mac, is that this show really IS funny. I laughed out loud several times. Maybe because I do theater at my College. I found some of the situations really funny. But comedy is a very subjective thing. I will say however, it wasn't the improv that I found funny. It was the actual situations. It was the disfunctional theater dynamic. I really think this show could do without improv. At the very least, the writing needs to be a A LOT more focused.
I understand how hard it is to write webisodes. In fact, my current project is an online sitcom type (with much lower production qualities than yours
). I am having a lot of the same problems as your writers are having. It's very hard to have a plot driven show in bitesized episodes, especially in comedy. But that doesn't mean that we can't try