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Old 02-19-2018, 10:22 AM   #1
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Short script finished. Need help with formatting.

I finally finished a script - yayyy me! - but I'm sure the formatting is not completely correct. I've tried to learn as much as possible by reading forums like this one, reading other scripts and watching plenty of educational videos, but I know I'm just not good enough at it. So now what???

Is there anyone willing to read over the script (7 pages) and edit it or format it properly? I'm willing to pay for the time. I would love to be able to send/post the script for a director to take over and shoot it, but I want to provide the best possible one.

I can also add a link to the script and will utilize any feedback given on it. What file sharing format would you guys like me to use?

I have two other ideas I want to write down but I don't want to do so without giving this first one my all.

Any help is greatly appreciated.
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Joey

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Old 02-19-2018, 10:30 AM   #2
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Why don't you use Celtx? It's free and puts the writing in the proper format so that you don't have to worry about it. I can still review your screenplay, but if you want to be a screenwriter, you should at least learn proper structure.
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Old 02-19-2018, 10:37 AM   #3
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I did use CeltX. I just don't know enough to be certain that I did everything as it should be done.

If you are willing to look it over, how would you like me to provide it?
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Old 02-19-2018, 10:46 AM   #5
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Would this work for now, until I get the scribd account situated?

https://drive.google.com/file/d/13Jn...w?usp=drivesdk

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You don't need an account. You can just upload a pdf file and post the link here.
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Old 02-19-2018, 04:42 PM   #7
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I don't know what you're looking at, but you need to go back and look again. You definitely do not want all of that capitalization at the beginning.

I uploaded the script to my 2nd feature (DETOURS) to google drive; feel free to check it out. We've already made & released the movie, so I have no issues with sharing the script.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1WaY...-GIJirwgC/view
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I don't know what you're looking at, but you need to go back and look again. You definitely do not want all of that capitalization at the beginning.

I uploaded the script to my 2nd feature (DETOURS) to google drive; feel free to check it out. We've already made & released the movie, so I have no issues with sharing the script.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1WaY...-GIJirwgC/view
Will do.
Thanks for the help.
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I don't know what you're looking at, but you need to go back and look again. You definitely do not want all of that capitalization at the beginning.

I uploaded the script to my 2nd feature (DETOURS) to google drive; feel free to check it out. We've already made & released the movie, so I have no issues with sharing the script.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1WaY...-GIJirwgC/view

Fixed the capitalization. New link posted above.
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The first thing I must point out is when you are writing a screenplay it is written in present tense not whatever tense you were writing in. For example, You had "An older lady is wrapping an item in a blanket" It should have been, " An older lady wraps an item in a blanket." I don't think your sluglines are properly hyphenated. And lastly, you should not, in your screenplay, under any circumstance tell the camera operator what to do. Close up, cut to, etc. Leave that for the production team at the actual shoot. Why do you keep using two space characters after a period?
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The first thing I must point out is when you are writing a screenplay it is written in present tense not whatever tense you were writing in. For example, You had "An older lady is wrapping an item in a blanket" It should have been, " An older lady wraps an item in a blanket." I don't think your sluglines are properly hyphenated. And lastly, you should not, in your screenplay, under any circumstance tell the camera operator what to do. Close up, cut to, etc. Leave that for the production team at the actual shoot. Why do you keep using two space characters after a period?


Thanks for the tips.
I'll work on switching to the correct tenses.
Not sure why I kept going back and forth on those.

Regarding the two spaces after a period, I'm writing this on my cellphone, usually while at work, so I think I'm just completely missing them. Thanks for pointing those out.

Regarding the shots, meaning telling the camera operator what/how, I see the movie in my head and I type it as I see it. I'll have to work on not putting in those details.
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In your screenplay you have two spaces after a period. This is not typewriter days with monospacing. Software do line spacing for you automatically. From Microsoft Word to the most advanced grammar editing software. If you want to write notes on how you want the camera to operate, to brief the cinematographer at a later date you can, but don't put it in the screenplay.
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In your screenplay you have two spaces after a period. This is not typewriter days with monospacing. Software do line spacing for you automatically. From Microsoft Word to the most advanced grammar editing software. If you want to write notes on how you want the camera to operate, to brief the cinematographer at a later date you can, but don't put it in the screenplay.

No, actually what I meant was that I'm writing the screenplays on my cellphone, usually while at work, although sometimes I write them while trying to put the little ones to sleep. I hardly have any time whatsoever to sit down, use my laptop and spend the time I wish I could

I'll make sure to remove the shot info and make notes for whomever. I may end up trying to shoot the movie myself if/when the time permits, if nobody is interested in it.

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It's always good to do things yourself, especially if you're a small production. At least you will have something on your reel for a big production to see.
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The two spaces thing isn't a big deal. While the software handles things today, many of us where taught to type with two spaces, even on a computer. I still do this today as evident by this post. I really won't throw off your page count drastically and nobody cares if you go single or double after the periods.
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