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Old 01-09-2019, 08:24 AM   #31
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Maybe I'm partly to blame. I didn't know she was struggling to write. Had I known she's been struggling for a long time, I would've written the vet in a more encouraging way. I think my original critique came out a bit harsh.
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Old 01-09-2019, 08:54 AM   #32
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Maybe I'm partly to blame. I didn't know she was struggling to write. Had I known she's been struggling for a long time, I would've written the vet in a more encouraging way. I think my original critique came out a bit harsh.
Whe are not considering the possibility that she is busy with something else..... school perhaps.
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Old 01-09-2019, 09:12 AM   #33
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Whe are not considering the possibility that she is busy with something else..... school perhaps.
I hope that's the case.
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Old 01-09-2019, 11:20 AM   #34
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Maybe I'm partly to blame. I didn't know she was struggling to write. Had I known she's been struggling for a long time, I would've written the vet in a more encouraging way. I think my original critique came out a bit harsh.
Not at all. Harsh criticism is important to a writer. Everything
you wrote is helpful to a writer who wants to get better.

And I don't think it's rude to ask a lot of questions on a platform
designed to ask questions. It's not even rude to not do anything
with the answers. It gets frustrating for us regulars but it's not
rude. If you don't want to reply or help you don't have to.

It's rude to call someone a liar.
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Old 01-09-2019, 10:00 PM   #35
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We all know Future Screen's track record. I'm happy that she has posted something, finally! But I was reiterating her past which we all are not forgetful of. I didn't mean to be rude but more humorous.
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Old 01-10-2019, 04:16 AM   #36
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But I was reiterating her past which we all are not forgetful of.
Weird. I could have sworn you meant to say, I was out of line and I apologize. But it sounded a lot more like, Im digging my heels in here and still feel the need to be rude. Hooray for the Internet.

Future_Screen, congratulations on getting something on paper. Thats a huge first step. I do hope, Quality aside, that youll come back to this thread, post a PDF that is more accessible to those of us who dont use CeltX, and consider the advice from the ones willing to read it (and those who already have read it) and offer constructive guidance.
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Old 01-10-2019, 10:06 PM   #37
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It's fine; she does this all the time. I want to help her. I even used to private message her when she used to ask for assistance, but *sigh* I give up.
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Old 01-12-2019, 09:34 AM   #38
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@everyone I made it new. Here's it as a PDF: https://www.dropbox.com/s/l5io43cw9r...fired.pdf?dl=0
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Old 01-12-2019, 10:26 AM   #39
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@everyone I made it new. Here's it as a PDF: https://www.dropbox.com/s/l5io43cw9r...fired.pdf?dl=0
Future-screen your PDF file can't be opened. PM me your email address I will send you a readable PDF of your script and you upload this PDF file.
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@pedramyz that sucks. I try to find a converter
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Old 01-12-2019, 10:29 AM   #41
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@pedramyz that sucks. I try to find a converter
I have converted your script into an accessible PDF. I can send it to your email if you can't convert it into a readable format. Just let me know.
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Old 01-12-2019, 10:36 AM   #42
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In the bottom of your Celtx text there is a button called TypeSet/PDF, click on that . After you've clicked on that a new button on the top appears which is "save PDF" . Save that unto your desktop and then upload it.
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Old 01-12-2019, 10:53 AM   #43
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Also a second critique ,

Your script has an interesting premise. It has potential. But it's a bit vague. For example we never get a clear answer to why the Director has turned ? what happened to him ? Why has he become one of the victims himself? Or maybe he hasn't turned at all? Maybe he wanted to know if Jemma could find out about them, and when she was close to uncovering the secret he barges in and fires her ? these questions arise because you haven't thoroughly explained what is happening. What are the Director's motivations ? If you can answer these questions in your script, it would be a more meaningful read. as Panos mentioned, this problem comes from the fact that you're rushing yourself to write. Take your time and try to explain things more clearly before jumping to abrupt conclusions and character arcs.

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Old 01-12-2019, 12:29 PM   #44
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Thanks. @pedramyz Please, do it via PM, can you?
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Old 01-12-2019, 12:42 PM   #45
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You can do it yourself in the software. Read his other post.
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