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Old 01-08-2019, 06:24 AM   #16
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Of course, you can't read it guys, because it was never there, to begin with!
As I said she's written 3 pages.
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As I said she's written 3 pages.
I believe you.
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Old 01-08-2019, 10:12 AM   #18
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Future - screen you are loosing the chance of people reading your script because of this Celtx format. Some have already shown interest in your script. Upload a PDF version of your script on Celtx site before people loose interest. There is an option in celtx app that allows you to convert your script into PDF format.
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Old 01-08-2019, 12:22 PM   #19
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Of course, you can't read it guys, because it was never there, to begin with!
Why are you always so negative and rude to her?
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Old 01-08-2019, 04:42 PM   #20
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Why are you always so negative and rude to her?
I was wondering the same thing. Itíd suck if heís the reason she hasnít returned to the thread to respond to anyone.
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Old 01-08-2019, 09:17 PM   #21
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Your pages create a lot of interest to the reader. You have great ideas - that was actually known to us, you just didn't want to write them.

My Critique is this:
You are to hurry to tell the story and you skip scenes. It was like a summary at some points. Relax and describe the movie, every scene.

Your format mistakes are countless, as they were mine in my first script
Read that book please: Richard Walter - Essentials Of Screenwriting. There are all the format mistakes gathered and more.

I think your way of writing have Hollywood vibe. I imagine Jemma's boss (which by the way I don't know why you call her director) transforming to a devil and instead of eating or killing Jemma saying to her "you are fired" That "You're fired" at the end is very Hollywood! That's great!
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Old 01-08-2019, 09:25 PM   #22
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I was wondering the same thing. Itíd suck if heís the reason she hasnít returned to the thread to respond to anyone.
She wasn't going to return anyway. That's what she always does. Post a thread then respond days later.
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She wasn't going to return anyway. That's what she always does. Post a thread then respond days later.
There is no need for you to be so rude and disrespectful to her.
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Old 01-08-2019, 11:24 PM   #24
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There is no need for you to be so rude and disrespectful to her.
I am merely stating facts.
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Old 01-08-2019, 11:39 PM   #25
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Old 01-09-2019, 12:47 AM   #26
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I am merely stating facts.
So you are saying it is a fact that she never posted the pages.
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Of course, you can't read it guys, because it was never there, to begin with!
Then are you saying that pedramyz is lying when he says he
read the pages?

You are calling one of them a liar.

I think that's rude and disrespectful. And I think there is no
need to treat people asking for a critique that way. Or people
who read and offer a critique.
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So why has not she responded?
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I think that's rude and disrespectful. And I think there is no
need to treat people asking for a critique that way. Or people
who read and offer a critique.
Yes... It's rude... It's also rude to ask a multitude times for criticism and when we give it she doesn't do anything with it. I know she cant help it... I have a few friends in the Breakcore scene with the same condition. Breakforce one and Low entropy. It's like talking to a concrete wall.... I like how different she is. I enjoy her post and feel how she tries to connect to people. And now for the first time, she has written 3 pages.
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So why has not she responded?
Perhaps itís because there are people who have other things going on and donít stay glued to an Internet forum 24/7.

Or itís because some jackass is accusing her of lying just because he wasnít able to download the file she posted.
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Old 01-09-2019, 05:24 AM   #30
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Quality's comment was too much: "I can't even download it. I don't believe he wrote anything."
and "Of course, you can't read it guys, because it was never there, to begin with!". Even if pedramyz hadn't already downloaded her script, one should check first, before being rude, even to Future_Screen.
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