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Old 01-06-2019, 04:21 AM   #1
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Critique my screenplay try

https://www.dropbox.com/s/khmhbvr4ai...red.celtx?dl=0
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Old 01-06-2019, 09:30 AM   #2
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Your script suffers from major grammatical errors to a point that they make your script unreadable. Both your dialogues and scene descriptions are nonsensical and unreadable. Either give your script to someone to edit it for you or write it in your own language and give it to someone to translate it to english. Also do not refer to your characters as "WOMAN" or "DIRECTOR" (I had this problem too) , instead give each character a specific name and address them with their names. Except for crowds (or insignificant characters who don't have any dialogues) you basically need to name every character in your script.

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Old 01-06-2019, 09:58 AM   #3
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I'm so glad you actually wrote something! It's nice to see.
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Old 01-06-2019, 12:00 PM   #4
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English ain't my first language @pedramyz
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.celtx files can’t be previewed.

Try PDF
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Old 01-06-2019, 02:09 PM   #6
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English ain't my first language @pedramyz
Auch nicht für ihn.
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Old 01-06-2019, 04:31 PM   #7
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I can't even download it. I don't believe he wrote anything.
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Old 01-06-2019, 05:13 PM   #8
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I can't even download it. I don't believe he wrote anything.
she has written 3 pages . U need to have the celtx app if u wanna open it.

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Old 01-07-2019, 10:35 AM   #9
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Still...

I'd love to see your 3 pages. How about uploading a PDF so those of
us who don't use Celtx can read it...
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I use Celtx (sometimes) on my laptop but it's the online version not the app. So even as a Celtx user, I can't open it.
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Old 01-07-2019, 02:41 PM   #11
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I use Celtx (sometimes) on my laptop but it's the online version not the app. So even as a Celtx user, I can't open it.
I downloaded the script from her link then I opened it with my Celtx in desktop.
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The point is, don't make people work to read your screenplay. Download, install, whatever. If it's work for us we will click the mouse elsewhere.
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Can you make a PDF from your Celtix files Future? I stopped using Geltex after the big upgrade...
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Of course, you can't read it guys, because it was never there, to begin with!
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Old 01-08-2019, 12:32 AM   #15
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Of course, you can't read it guys, because it was never there, to begin with!

pedramyz said he could open it. If there was nothing there I am assuming that he would have said so.

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