Originally Posted by Fullmetal-Animator
However, I’m still writing the first draft (should be done tonight) and the thought of Lifted is still nagging at me in the back of my head.
I hope you got distracted and haven't gotten around to finishing, even though it is your first draft.
Your dilemma kept circling around my mind overnight and I may have found a rather simple solution.
> Katsumoto needs to be placed in a position where he is forced to make a decision near the end of the story to either be mean to Shiro or to help him.
Of course Katsumoto's going to choose the mentor path and help Shiro, but it shifts the entire focus of the entertaining story from the dumb-bunny Shiro to the same position all adults, especially parents, face.
FWIW, I'd craft a story where the ideal solution is for the two to simply switch roles; instead of trying to get dumb-bunny Shiro to perform a set of tasks he's not capable of performing, Katsumoto places him in a role in which he can perform.
"Don't put the perfect first-baseman on the pitcher's mound. Put him on first-base, dummy!"
sort of thing.
Katsumoto must learn to be a better manager through making better decisions.