Hello everyone. I've been lurking around here for a few days, and this forum seems like a really great online community for independent filmmakers. So I'm glad to have found this site.
So, naturally, I'm looking for some input/advice on an idea I'm trying to adapt into a screenplay for an assignment for class. The assignment is basically to write a 3 minute short film (so 3 pages max) with a beginning, middle, and end. The thing is, the film has to be producible by a student filmmaker on a tight budget, such as myself.
My idea, and it's a fairly simple one:
It begins with a young man dressed sharply in a business suit waiting for a big interview in an office waiting room. He ends up spilling coffee all over himself, he panics completely, and tries everything to clean it off but to no avail. He is called into the interview by a secretary and makes his walk of shame towards the employer's office. The film ends with him walking into the office and revealing that the employer has just recently spilled coffee all over himself as well and the two share a laugh as the protagonist's tension is relieved.
So my question is a general question.
What do you think would make this story pop/more interesting? How can I make it clear that this interview is BIG, and that spilling coffee all over himself is the stupidest thing this man could have ever done. What sort of dialogue should there be? The protagonist talking to himself? Can I write it in 3 pages?
I don't know, so many questions, and I'm sure I will answer most of them myself, but any advice is greatly appreciated.
Thanks in advance.
So, naturally, I'm looking for some input/advice on an idea I'm trying to adapt into a screenplay for an assignment for class. The assignment is basically to write a 3 minute short film (so 3 pages max) with a beginning, middle, and end. The thing is, the film has to be producible by a student filmmaker on a tight budget, such as myself.
My idea, and it's a fairly simple one:
It begins with a young man dressed sharply in a business suit waiting for a big interview in an office waiting room. He ends up spilling coffee all over himself, he panics completely, and tries everything to clean it off but to no avail. He is called into the interview by a secretary and makes his walk of shame towards the employer's office. The film ends with him walking into the office and revealing that the employer has just recently spilled coffee all over himself as well and the two share a laugh as the protagonist's tension is relieved.
So my question is a general question.
What do you think would make this story pop/more interesting? How can I make it clear that this interview is BIG, and that spilling coffee all over himself is the stupidest thing this man could have ever done. What sort of dialogue should there be? The protagonist talking to himself? Can I write it in 3 pages?
I don't know, so many questions, and I'm sure I will answer most of them myself, but any advice is greatly appreciated.
Thanks in advance.