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Old 08-21-2018, 04:16 PM   #16
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Potentially you could leave the slaughterhouse totally out of it and have the cops running this on their own.

It makes it more personal and less convoluted.
True, and I'd need someone at the airport who was in on it.
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So maybe THAT'S the family business in on it. The small airfield.
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Old 08-21-2018, 04:32 PM   #18
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So maybe THAT'S the family business in on it. The small airfield.
Well gee wiz I think you're right!
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Jesus Christ. I just looked up the show and saw it was based on a book. I had no idea what Sharp Objects was about. I hate when this happens.
Gillian Flynn of "Gone Girl" fame.

The HBO series is moving so, so slowly...too slowly.

I think it did need to be more than a movie but shouldn't have been anything more than 3 or 4 hour long episodes at best.

It's 8 hours of Amy Adams driving around seeing things and drinking as much as it's about the actual novel and story.
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Gillian Flynn of "Gone Girl" fame.

The HBO series is moving so, so slowly...too slowly.

I think it did need to be more than a movie but shouldn't have been anything more than 3 or 4 hour long episodes at best.

It's 8 hours of Amy Adams driving around seeing things and drinking as much as it's about the actual novel and story.
My story is obviously different enough, just an odd coincidence that a current HBO show takes place in small town Missouri and follows someone trying to find out what's happening.
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I picture the airfield being a very small landing strip, an old family business they deiced to open because they had so much land, and they live in trailers just on the side of the strip, and carry shotguns to chase away the kids that like to graffiti the planes at night, even Granny is known to blast some rock salt in their direction. LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh man. Maybe I went too far.
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My story is obviously different enough, just an odd coincidence that a current HBO show takes place in small town Missouri and follows someone trying to find out what's happening.
Oh I agree.

I like your setup and heck I'd even like a kind of "red herring" thought that the guy who hits/kills the LEO is the main protagonist and then he's suddenly killed leaving people thinking WTF?

Like he's a known drug addict (or some other thing that an influx of sudden cash would be a bad, bad idea) so he intentionally keeps the money/hides it, but reports the incident that killed the LEO (although it'll be tough to have him slam into the car and be not guilty of some crime).

After he reports the crime and that some young girl who didn't speak any English was in the car but ran away, etc. he holes up in a motel and starts spending the cash. Blow, hookers, etc.

Next day, he's dead. Hotel is ransacked but he was spending cash like he had a press. Time to interview the people he was laying benjamins on.
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I picture the airfield being a very small landing strip, an old family business they deiced to open because they had so much land, and they live in trailers just on the side of the strip, and carry shotguns to chase away the kids that like to graffiti the planes at night, even Granny is known to blast some rock salt in their direction. LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh man. Maybe I went too far.
Haha you know it's hard to tell if you're mostly sarcastic when you post or if you're actually interested in other's drivel.

Here is the actual airfield.

https://goo.gl/maps/PN98g3NZ3o82

Seriously though, Harper is in the middle of fucking nowhere.
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Not sarcastic at all. But I think if the family is outcasts, and possibly called inbreds by the community, it adds a bit to why they are willing to be a part of selling humans.
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Haha you know it's hard to tell if you're mostly sarcastic when you post or if you're actually interested in other's drivel.

Here is the actual airfield.

https://goo.gl/maps/PN98g3NZ3o82

Seriously though, Harper is in the middle of fucking nowhere.
I see that Finishing Touch Hair & Tanning is kitty corner from the airfield. Do they also offer 'massages'? Where they add that extra personal "finishing touch" to every customer?

Careful, you might be actually stumbling into an illicit enterprise in Harper.
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haha!
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I see that Finishing Touch Hair & Tanning is kitty corner from the airfield. Do they also offer 'massages'? Where they add that extra personal "finishing touch" to every customer?

Careful, you might be actually stumbling into an illicit enterprise in Harper.
Hell it's even right in front of Westview Lodge and Apartments.

You tell me there's a Pollos Hermanos there and I'll make the call to the feds right now.
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Not sarcastic at all. But I think if the family is outcasts, and possibly called inbreds by the community, it adds a bit to why they are willing to be a part of selling humans.
I could just make the Sheriff's brother own and operate the airfield. One night this brother saw something he shouldn't have, and the person in the plane offered a deal rather than just killing him. He keeps the deal secret from his Sheriff brother and here we are. The person who got hit by the car could have been this brother. So now when the trafficker person arrives, there won't be his usual "I didn't see nothin'" guy waiting for him, which would present a problem.
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I see that Finishing Touch Hair & Tanning is kitty corner from the airfield. Do they also offer 'massages'? Where they add that extra personal "finishing touch" to every customer?

Careful, you might be actually stumbling into an illicit enterprise in Harper.
I'm telling you, these small ass towns are interesting. haha.
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