This is by far the dumbest thing I've ever attempted. I suck at poetry, but I need your honest input before I embarrass myself in front of her. What do you guys think of this poem?
A Porcupine Mind
I met a strange girl. She’s a one of a kind
A porcupine mind. From the soul to her eyes
She keeps a careful distance
Except to those she truly misses
But to all those around her
They see needles that shine.
Not the life, not the happiness, the culture, or excitement.
Many think she’s unhappy
Perhaps a little bit crazy.
But, the porcupine is the smartest and the cleverest of all
She could show up to places and never befall
The others stay close to too many people
Their stories infused. They’re all trapped in their issues.
Not the porcupine girl. The one who’s strange and ambitious
She has a fire that drives. It’s kind of like mine.
She’s on the move at all times, to define the old times
Her words can shape mountains and her strides can move time.
I traveled to places. I met many great faces.
But none can compare to this porcupine girl.
She’s a one of a kind. A true gem of her time
I feel lucky to know her. She’s a porcupine mind.
My plan is to put this on a fancy card and get her a porcupine stuffed doll. I hope this goes well...
A Porcupine Mind
I met a strange girl. She’s a one of a kind
A porcupine mind. From the soul to her eyes
She keeps a careful distance
Except to those she truly misses
But to all those around her
They see needles that shine.
Not the life, not the happiness, the culture, or excitement.
Many think she’s unhappy
Perhaps a little bit crazy.
But, the porcupine is the smartest and the cleverest of all
She could show up to places and never befall
The others stay close to too many people
Their stories infused. They’re all trapped in their issues.
Not the porcupine girl. The one who’s strange and ambitious
She has a fire that drives. It’s kind of like mine.
She’s on the move at all times, to define the old times
Her words can shape mountains and her strides can move time.
I traveled to places. I met many great faces.
But none can compare to this porcupine girl.
She’s a one of a kind. A true gem of her time
I feel lucky to know her. She’s a porcupine mind.
My plan is to put this on a fancy card and get her a porcupine stuffed doll. I hope this goes well...