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Old 01-28-2013, 12:25 PM   #1
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Mailbox-A short film

Here is my latest short film, if you have any constructive criticism, I would really appreciate it as I am fairly new at this! Thanks!

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Well apart from the story and music choices it could have been 5 times shorter
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ok, thanks
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ok heres my opinion, im not right and im not wrong, its again merely my opinion and i care not for what anyone says about it.

This was 1 minute of prolonged pointlessness.

the beginning was some weird thing going on going all wobbly or whatever, the story was not really a story.. the build up was lethargic.

i think you must ask yourself, is this worth watching, is it interesting, is it appealing, is it something i can build a fanbase from, if your answer is yes to this footage then bang your head against that incoming car..

however thats not to say this couldnt be interesting, i see this taking the comedy approach, so what could you do next time? not make it as long for nothing.

make it funny or something.

actually give it a worthy story everything must have a story this to me was just a one liner man walks to mailbox and gets run over.

dont make it predictable.

feel me homey
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Old 01-28-2013, 04:34 PM   #5
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Ya, thanks! I appreciate whay you said! I will definately work on that!
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