Some interesting things happening here, but it gets confusing at the end. I think you can distill some of your shots. You don't have to use them wholly from the beginning to the end, but cut them more abruptly to get the jarring tone that you're after.
Some interesting things happening here, but it gets confusing at the end. I think you can distill some of your shots. You don't have to use them wholly from the beginning to the end, but cut them more abruptly to get the jarring tone that you're after.