Hi there. Congrats on finishing your film. A few things.
1: Didn't finish it. The sound was pretty poor quality. You could fix it getting a zoom recorder and a better mic.
2: The cinematography was flat and dull. Check out the youtube channel 'every frame a painting'. You'll get some good advice there.
3: It looks like you shot it on your own. Get some mates down to help.
Hope that helps a bit.