Read and review please

Sorry the above link was problematic here is the new link that works

https://docs.google.com/viewer?a=v&...MTkzZi00ZmIxLThlZjYtMDZhMzFkZjU2M2Yy&hl=en_US

I've only read the first few page, but I do intend to read the rest. I remember you posting this a while back, I still like the idea.

On these first few pages, there are several spelling and grammar mistakes. Correct them. Your lines of action are quite long, break them up a little more, to help the action flow. Think of them almost as individual shots, every time there's a cut, start a new line of action. The biggest problem... Who the f@&k is Xandoo? Contextually, I'm guessing it's Mefistopholese? This is confusing, it needs fixing!

I'll read some more tomorrow and see if I can answer anything a little more specifically.

I, too, only read a few pages.

I know this is a first draft but all the typos and spelling mistakes makes
it a difficult read. May I respectfully suggest that correct those before
you show it around?

You will get some criticism regarding your use of camera movies in a script.
You might want to either remove these to make your script more standard
or tell people upfront that this is a script you will be directing.

mad your right xandoo is Meteistophes I thought i caught all of thoses. I will also go back and recheck the spelling i thought i caught everything any thing else