I thought it was pretty amusing.
I get that you want to punish Mel Gibson. But I feel like the weakest part of the screenplay, as is, was giving him only, essentially, three things to say, which became tedious (beating a dead horse). So I think I would recommend, after covering those three or so things you want to get out there, that you mix it up a bit more and give him a little more to say, or at least more varied ways for him to say it --at some point.
I know you've given your main character, Truman, something of a character arc, and maybe that's enough. But it occurs to me that a way to "fix" the Mel Gibson part, if I'm to be believed about it being problematic, might be to give Mel some sort of a character arc, as well.
I look forward to seeing the show!
