watch my first Short film the Esoteric

Hey guys, this film i made to get the feeling back of what its like to be behind and in front of the camera.
I feel like the ending doesn't really end, but because this was only a 1 day shoot, I wanted to emphasise on Aliens and religion, being both misunderstood, and both maybe having something more in common,
Prologue
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R1tDahYHv6Y&list=LL9Dage0dycExp3lqOHh1PXg

Part 1
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zZuXrYiTfok

Part 2
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PcD6SESU--8

Tell me what you guys think?

Watched it, needs work
the sound goes from loud to almost none existent and editing needs to be tighter

dlmade said:

Hey guys, this film i made to get the feeling back of what its like to be behind and in front of the camera.
I feel like the ending doesn't really end, but because this was only a 1 day shoot, I wanted to emphasise on Aliens and religion, being both misunderstood, and both maybe having something more in common,
Prologue
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R1tDahYHv6Y&list=LL9Dage0dycExp3lqOHh1PXg

Part 1
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zZuXrYiTfok

Part 2
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PcD6SESU--8

Tell me what you guys think?

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I'm a beginner filmmaker aswell so I'll try give you a few pointers that I've picked up 1) Get rid of the transitions, they look a bit tacky. 2) Look up the rule of thirds 3) You say very little with a lot of words, keep the dialogue more concise. There's a lot more wrong with it but for your next projects try tackle things a bit smaller in scope and focus on one aspect of filmmaking for each short film you make. That way you can focus on that one thing and do it properly. Rinse and repeat untill you have a better understanding.

Thanks Guys really appreciated the feedback.
Yeah I know the sound issue was a main problem because I didn't have a mic.