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Old 01-08-2017, 07:40 PM   #1
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2nd Draft: AMERICA LOVE STORY

AMERICA LOVE STORY

Author: Junsai Xu

LOGLINE:
Firmly holding to the notion, “no one can offend my wife”, the husband must evolve from tragedy to drama, making every effort to help his wife overcome mistakes and crimes which had plagued them for 10 years of their marriage.

STORY OVERVIEW:
Dazhi Tang caressed Joanna, making every effort to help her give up smoking, give up drinking, commit to drug rehabilitation, stop gambling, conceal murder abortion, engage in times of crisis,bravely avenge;finally caused the affectionate ending cliffhanger in profusion.
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MAIN CHARACTERS

1.Joanna (European descent):Blonde. Curves gallop, devil figure, the most beautiful who would make wild geese to alight and river fish to dive for gaze. Insists on preserving the love in purity, nobility, nicety. When she appears at the age of nineteen.

2.Dazhi Tang (Asian descent):Being knowledgeable, seeking truth from facts, extremely strong and handsome. He's a newspaper man in China. Becoming a dealer after immigrating into the United States. Highly emphasizing the problem of life quality. His maternal grandmother was the French. When he appears at the age of forty-five.

3.Catherine (European descent):Looking just like Joanna's eldest sister on appearance. Her personality is similar to limpid, trickly, warm water. Ardently loving her descendant with all her heart. When she appears at the age of thirty-nine.

4.Margaret (European descent):Very beautiful, but being too thin, much bad habits. She regards younger female cousin Joanna as the rival in love. She never stops waiting for an opportunity to revenge. When she appears at the age of twenty-three.

5.Christopher (European descent):Originally being a bank clerk. Releasing from prison after serving his sentence, ingratiating himself with Margaret, became plotter and accomplice. When he appears at the age of thirty-eight.

6.Yangyang Tang (Asian descent):The son of Dazhi Tang and his ex-wife Beilei Hua. When he appears at the age of eleven.

7.Amy (Half-blood):The daughter of Dazhi Tang and Joanna. When she appears to be a neonate.

8.Beilei Hua (Asian descent):Dazhi Tang's ex-wife. When she appears at the age of thirty-seven.

9.Shuier Li (Asian descent):Dazhi Tang's cohabitation ex-girlfriend. When she appears at the age of thirty.

10.Wharton (African descent):Dazhi Tang's friend. When he appears at the age of twenty-six.

11.Shirley (African descent):Dazhi Tang's friend. When she appears at the age of twenty-one.

12.Whitefield (African descent):Dazhi Tang's friend. When he appears at the age of fifty.
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When Dazhi Tang was doing his long distance running exercise, recognizing Margaret and Joanna. Because he frequently had the agile competition with Joanna, thereupon they became friends little by little. Afterwards, he scented, Margaret smoked too much herself, and also drove Joanna to imitation along with her.He conceived the idea of wanting to break off their friendship.

2

Both Margaret and Joanna became aware of good impression on Dazhi Tang secretively. Therefore, obviously suffering a leaving them out in the cold, Margaret smoked less, then Joanna straightforwardly quitted smoking. Hence Dazhi Tang resumed his association with Margaret and Joanna. In the end, Dazhi Tang had a strong admiration for Joanna, went hand in hand by both of them, gave Joanna a big hug. The result directly made Margaret fulmination, anguish, furiousness. While Catherine showed her sincere favour on Dazhi Tang.

3

Joanna first arrived in Shanghai, being in contact with Shuier Li of Dazhi Tang's cohabitation ex-girlfriend, thus greatly experienced marriage culture, apparel culture, custom culture, and so on in China. Afterwards, Joanna specially went to Toronto, visiting Yangyang Tang, the son of Dazhi Tang and his ex-wife Beilei Hua. Facing alternative livelihood, she expressed her perplexity, contradiction, tolerance in a certain degree.

4

The time looked also like a running water after marriage. Dazhi Tang requested Joanna to go to library for reading thereupon. Where does know, to the later, Joanna became an honoured guest in bar. Dazhi Tang urged Joanna to quit drinking, Joanna didn't listen. Dazhi Tang had only to take measures , forcing Joanna to be unable to stand. She gave up drinking at last.

5

Joanna became a cashier in supermarket. When their life had been restored calmly, the evil claws have unsheathed again, castting a disaster that lasted a few years. During this period, Joanna conducted an induced abortion, three times of the detoxification living in hospital successively. Vigorously Dazhi Tang kept forging ahead from beginning to end. As well as, under the help of Wharton, Shirley, Whitefield, and so on friends, going to rescue a fiasco in great lengths.

6

There's the termination of suffering hardship finally. Amy, their healthy, lovely, darling daughter, was born. Grandmother Catherine took great care of granddaughter Amy in dedicating herself wholeheartedly. This fact had been affecting Dazhi Tang deeply, superadding for together morning and night in a zero distance, both sides could hardly restrain themselves from revealing the true state of their mind. But it triggered off wind, storm, surge.

7

Dazhi Tang and Catherine insistently considered this disturbance as being restricted within the explanation of their heart knot.But from an instinctive reaction, Joanna always held the grudge and refused to forgive. In order to revenge herself for this matter, unexpectedly walked into a casino, lost in a complete mess, caused a lot of damages. In the end, Joanna brought about the whole family life falling into great difficulties.

8

In order to pay off a large gambling debt, Joanna went to restaurant once again and returned to her former career as a waitress. But her income wasn't high, and she repaid slow. Joanna suffered pressing repeatedly from the creditor. In having no alternative or in hopelessness, unexpectedly Joanna deliberately or unconsciously participated in conspiracy, evil, crime. For this reason, the family has already showed the disassembly crisis tendency significantly.

9

Joanna was continually making mistakes, certainly hasing her subjective reason. But these things occurred in the black curtain behind, It was Margaret who had conducted the obstruction, the mischief, the injury throughout. Margaret pursued the retaliation principle that if it's unavailable and it's just destructive. She contrived to pound the marriage which had brought Dazhi Tang and Joanna together for a long time. And the accomplice exactly was heartless, cruel, malicious Christopher.

10

On the one hand, Dazhi Tang proceeded the reflection deep; On the other hand, realized the actual situation. He simmered with rage, rose up by resistance without negotiations, utilized a wolf and a jackal for being too greedy of gain, designed drawing a snake out of its hole, paid off an old grudge really and truly. But even dealing with thus, still formed the very different endings in three kinds of content that has happened, is happening, may occur and so on.
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AMERICA LOVE STORY

FADE IN

Titles

Harmony pavilion.

Carved stone.

Title:AMERICA LOVE STORY

UNA PALOMA BLANCA sounds.

Aerially views the area.

The cast List.

Greenwood Avenue extends.

Subtitles:Spring 2007, Bethlehem,Pennsylvania.

On Greenwood Avenue, run, skateboard,walk, cycle, dribble,play.

The cast List.

On the lawn,there's a woman.She throws frisbee.The dog jumps,opens its mouth, holds in its teeth,and then delivers it. Circulates.

UNA PALOMA BLANCA ceases.

UPPER PART

THE FIRST SCREEN

1,EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-DAY
  
Dazhi Tang marches.

MARGARET
(winking)
He's running over.

JOANNA
(warming up)
You see, I want to exceed him more than eight hundred meters today.

Dazhi Tang arrives, says hello, invites practice, Joanna and Margaret Start. Dazhi Tang is behind. Margaret stops.

MARGARET
(gasping out)
Joanna is a sports athlete. Do you catch up with her?

DAZHI TANG
Try it.

MARGARET
Be afraid of impossibility.

DAZHI TANG
Is it? Originally, ladies first. now, I candidly admit defeat.

They 'high-'five. Dazhi Tang runs.

2, EXT.CROSSROADS-DAY

Come across a red light. Joanna stops. Dazhi Tang closes.
  
DAZHI TANG
I have observed, you had the rules. Ran two or three steps, breathed out one time; ran two or three steps,breathed in one time. Are you a  professional contestant?

JOANNA
Can't equate. And in fact, I liked long-distance running in Freedom High School, a third in five thousand meters competition.

DAZHI TANG
Extraordinary!

JOANNA
Thank you!The green light is on. Let's start. Follow me, don't lag behind!

3, EXT.SKATEBOARD TRAINING GROUND-DAY

Joanna waits Dazhi Tang.

JOANNA
Dazhi Tang, are you okay? Or else, relax a little.

DAZHI TANG
I'm powerless, no spirit. You're strong, should exert.

JOANNA
Oh well, that's all, I continue.

DAZHI TANG
Thank you!I try my best,not strained.

The distance increases. Joanna urges. Dazhi Tang shakes his head. Joanna shrugs her shoulders.
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Old 01-29-2017, 12:32 PM   #5
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AMERICA LOVE STORY

THE SECOND SCREEN

4, EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-DAY
  
Dazhi Tang accelerates. Joanna doesn't pay attention,obstructs after discovery.

JOANNA
(embarrassing)
Hey! Man, should you make a concession to this girl?

DAZHI TANG
(dodging)
Ah! Big missy, do you understand there seems fraud in the arena?

JOANNA
Dazhi Tang,pretended,snuck a attack,counted for nothing!

DAZHI TANG
Joanna,don't worry, take it easy, will win!

Dazhi Tang crosses the road. Joanna comes across a red light.

5, EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-DAY

JOANNA(V.O.)
Dazhi Tang, did trick, how annoying!

Dazhi Tang runs out of the bushes.

DAZHI TANG
Scud, are you leading the long-distance running again?!

JOANNA
(seeing elsewhere)
You would apply scheming. I can't fight you.

DAZHI TANG
Just kidding around, don't take it seriously. I'm behind you, you won. Now,please turn about.

Joanna does according to the request.

DAZHI TANG
Big Missy, Big beauty, Big champion, we conduct Olympic Games Award Ceremony.

Dazhi Tang offers wildflower.Joanna smells,runs. Dazhi Tang follows.

6, EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-DAY

Margaret with a cigarette in her mouth,applauds. Joanna sprints. Dazhi Tang canters.

MARGARET
(stretching thumb)
How about?Joanna is very powerful?

DAZHI TANG
(making a bow with hands folded in front)
Having received the instruction. Extraordinary skill really!

JOANNA
You're modest. I belong to inaccurate designation!

MARGARET
Joanna is 1.65 meters, but her legs are very developed; your height is 1.85 meters, obviously trends thin, muscle is less. Therefore, there's a difference in strength between you and Joanna.

DAZHI TANG
You're an analyst, put it right.

JOANNA
Stop!Margaret, not so loquacious.
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AMERICA LOVE STORY

THE THIRD SCREEN

7,EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-DAY

The car of selling for cold drinks approaches. People act.

DAZHI TANG
Please wait,I go to buy ice cream.

MARGARET
We're not children。。。

DAZHI TANG
Absolutely right!But I believe, when you appreciate, you'll become children more than children.

Joanna pushes Dazhi Tang.

JOANNA
Yes!That's right!I want to eat.

Dazhi Tang takes the reels. Joanna three pieces. Margaret two pieces. Himself one piece.

8, EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-DAY

MARGARET
(being unhappy)
As an athlete, Joanna worked hard, wasn't it? Then I was a large coach and a large referee, was unimportant? Why have I got less one?

DAZHI TANG
(laughing)
I'm sorry.Originally being the same.Because you smoked very much, so I deliberately reduced one piece.Now can I give it to you?

MARGARET
Just about right. Tell you, Dazhi Tang, both of us are cousins, we are friends too. Must be treated equally!

DAZHI TANG
All right! I'll pay attention to this problem.

Joanna gives Dazhi Tang a reel.

JOANNA
You haven't had. You're thirsty too, quickly eat.

DAZHI TANG
You're very kind. To be honest,you don't understand. In peacetime, I wouldn't touch.

Dazhi Tang returns the reel to Joanna.

DAZHI TANG(CONT’D)
Because, World Health Organization has got conclusion after investigation:there's a harmfulness to be addicted to sugar, more than smoking. If consume the food of high sugar content long, human health will be damaged.

Margaret and Joanna look each other.

9, EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-DAY

Margaret smokes. Joanna and Dazhi Tang arrive. They 'high-'five.

Joanna says hungry. Dazhi Tang requires them to wait, leaves.

Dazhi Tang is very happy, comes back, holds a food bag, scowls.
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AMERICA LOVE STORY

THE FOURTH SCREEN

10, EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-DAY

DAZHI TANG
Joanna, how have you smoked also?

JOANNA
It doesn't matter. Margaret gave it to me.

MARGARET
What's wrong,take us as girlfriends?Management is quite strict also.

DAZHI TANG
What words?Don't involve in friend relationship. Just tobacco gas is more harmful.

MARGARET
Then you're a dealer in casino, still having passive smoking every day.

DAZHI TANG
Now that we've immigrated into the United States, I've to work hard in order to earn money.

MARGARET
You put the situation seriously.

DAZHI TANG
Everyone knows, in addition to smoke-filled, the deal work is good. So after getting off work, absolutely I fly away from smoke taste very far.

11, EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-DAY

Joanna wants to pinch cigarette. Margaret obstructs.

MARGARET
(prevaricating)
Knew it! But that's all today. We'll improve later.

DAZHI TANG
(expressing sincerity)
Thank you! Should obey a useful advice. Health is the most important in life.

Dazhi Tang distributes. both of them with the same: a hamburger,a bottle of mineral water, a bunch of red grapes.

MARGARET
Thank Dazhi! I'm hungry too. Feel embarrassment, rashly hasty. Ask a question, where do you live?

DAZHI TANG
Close by A'Hart market.If you have time,please visit my humble abode.

MARGARET and JOANNA
Yeah! All right! All right!

12, EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-DAY

Joanna gives tobacco to Margaret.Margaret ignites.Both of them mount the clouds and ride the mists. Dazhi Tang arrives, nods, silences, gazes at Joanna.

MARGARET
(being blunt)
Dazhi Tang,you're non-gentleman today, get angriness, why so serious?

DAZHI TANG
(being unhappy)
Big Missy, I've just forgot about myself, but being irresponsible for what you'd said.

Margaret tilts her body sideways, continues smoking, silences. Joanna gets rid of long cigarette butt. Both of them are speechless, run.
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AMERICA LOVE STORY

THE FIFTH SCREEN

13,EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-DAY

DAZHI TANG
(being unbearable)
When you were chatting and laughting, your mouth looked like a flower, floated a fitful fragrance, irresistibly drew my attention and interest. Just now, you breathe out a whiff of cigarette smell, make people disgusting loathsomeness or repellence!

JOANNA
(prevaricating)
I was out of curiosity,have also smoked a few days. Although it's not very good,the problem isn't necessarily serious. Therefore can be light or heavy. Why is your opinion very sharp?

DAZHI TANG
Hey! Relating to your health! Okay, even if I put my finger into another's pie.

JOANNA
No,man,please be tolerant!Yeah, only small error,then let someone off easy.

DAZHI TANG
Big Missy, only science will adhere to the correct reason.

Dazhi Tang accelerates, runs along.

14, EXT.SKATEBOARD TRAINING GROUND-DAY

Dazhi Tang waits. Joanna approaches.

DAZHI TANG
Tell you, take it easy, I'll run first!

JOANNA
You're abnormal, do you want to give me a hard time?What a shame!

DAZHI TANG
Big Missy, absolutely daren't. You like smoking, I escape cigarette. It's ok?

JOANNA
Dazhi Tang, you're not good. Play tricks,bully me, ignore you!

Dazhi Tang moves forward.

JOANNA
Dazhi Tang, don't do that, please wait, I'm coming 。。。

Dazhi Tang stops. Joanna accelerates, catches up. Dazhi Tang darts. Joanna lags.

15, EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-DAY

Dazhi Tang arrives, gasps.

MARGARET
Amiss, what's wrong, you're more fast than Joanna?

DAZHI TANG
Joanna is smoking, so slow, you're happy?

MARGARET
(fitting in exactly with her wish)
Come very fast!Joanna has addicted.

DAZHI TANG
(feeling helplessness)
You've intended to instigate, got the instigation accusation!

MARGARET
Joanna is an adult, almost nineteen years old.

DAZHI TANG
Even ninety-nine years old, information must also be good.

MARGARET
(being insidious)
Hum, she only just needs smoking, you'll be certainly opposed,but also do you give more reel to her?

DAZHI TANG
(being indignant)
Yes,in order to petty profit,you play deliberateness,not hesitate to harm others。。。

Joanna arrives. Dazhi Tang stops. Everybody 'high-'five. Dazhi Tang leaves.
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The title irks me because it is not American Love Story, or America, a Love Story.
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Thank you for your correction

Master, thank you for your correction. We should all know, an adjective is usually used to an attribute in many cases. But there still is other models, namely a noun is also used to an attribute. For example, 1, United States Congress. 2, Massachusetts inst tech. 3, The Philadelphia story. Here, the definite article THE is exactly used to specify STORY.
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Master, thank you for your correction. We should all know, an adjective is usually used to an attribute in many cases. But there still is other models, namely a noun is also used to an attribute. For example, 1, United States Congress. 2, Massachusetts inst tech. 3, The Philadelphia story. Here, the definite article THE is exactly used to specify STORY.
With this explanation it's confusing to me that your title isn't
"The America Love Story". You don't use THE in the title yet
you tell us that THE is used to specify STORY.

You would use "the" to refer to an entire group of people. In France
the people are called French. In Japan the people are called Japanese.
In Germany the people are called German. In the United States the
people are called American.

I do not believe even "The America Love Story" is grammatically correct.
Your title "America Love Story" isn't. "An American Love Story" or "The
American Love Story" is the way we speak.

Titles do NOT need to be grammatically correct so if this is your title you
can stay with it. It just sounds wrong to most of us native English speakers.
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THE SIXTH SCREEN

16,EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-DAY

Dazhi Tang comes back,stops,beckones. Both of them go over there, each gets a can of coca-cola, a pack of camel cigarette.

JOANNA
(scaring)
What do you mean? Sugar and tobacco aren't good according to your opinion. Why bought? Teased us?

DAZHI TANG
(puzzling)
I don't know.

MARGARET
(Self-deprecating)
Having drink,have to drink; having smoke, have to smoke; having happiness, have to be happy. Don't worry a lot. My friend, is that right?

DAZHI TANG
Don't know.

Dazhi Tang leaves.

MARGARET
Dazhi Tang, Dazhi Tang, how you didn't say goodbye?

DAZHI TANG
Don't know.

17, EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-NIGHTFALL

Dazhi Tang comes. Margaret goes to meet, outstretches her hand. Dazhi Tang 'high-'five, 'High-'five with Joanna again.

MARGARET
Hey! Man, how many days haven't you practised long-distance running?

DAZHI TANG
Oh, miss, I've changed to going to work and getting off work on foot.

MARGARET
Why? Don't drive? Back and forth every day? Are you so strong?

DAZHI TANG
Because it's close,from my door to the locker room,eighteen minutes.

JOANNA
Yeah, Dazhi Tang firmly believe health to depend on movement.

DAZHI TANG
Thank you! I also think smoking may result in weak.

MARGARET
You're very excellent. But this isn't good, your words are too sharp.

18,EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-NIGHTFALL

DAZHI TANG
I'm sorry,I'm wrong,please forgive me.

Dazhi Tang says goodbye. Margaret signals. Joanna follows. Dazhi Tang stops.

DAZHI TANG
Hello, Joanna!It's late, still exercise? Not right, go home soon.

JOANNA
Dazhi Tang, hello!Excuse me. Right now, can we have a chat?
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SCREEN 7

19, EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-NIGHTFALL

DAZHI TANG
You're too polite. Have something to say as much as possible.

JOANNA
She's smoked less. I've quitted smoking.

DAZHI TANG
Really? Big news!Very good!

JOANNA
It's a fact. I don't dare to deceive you.

DAZHI TANG
(being lost in wonder)
Haw!Based on experience, I knew very well, who was willing to listen to whom in life? So you're the best audience. Look like an unpolished jade that can be carved. Therefore, I've really touched extremely.

JOANNA
(sincerely gratifying)
Then you're not angry? Then we've reconciled? Then we can practise running?

DAZHI TANG
Not wrong, thank you! Joanna.

JOANNA
Thank you! Dazhi Tang. See you tomorrow.

DAZHI TANG
Slightly slow, I've to send you a ride.

JOANNA
You're always watertight.

They 'high-'five, arrive. Everyone 'high-'five.

20, EXT.GREENWOOD AVENUE-DAY

Joanna is in front. Dazhi Tang follows. Joanna slows up. Dazhi Tang falls into step.

JOANNA
Dazhi Tang, right now, can we have a chat?

DAZHI TANG
Joanna, I want to ask for your instructions, can we chat ten times?

JOANNA
Dazhi Tang, To be quite honest about it, I'm serious.

DAZHI TANG
Joanna, no kidding around, I'm very solemn.

JOANNA
Thanks for your advice. You 're an old traveler who has a lot of rivalry!Being such that, Margaret felt embarrassment, wanted me to pass words on to you. She'll have a birthday tomorrow, can you add some fun of the thing?

DAZHI TANG
How old is she?

JOANNA
Twenty-three years old.

DAZHI TANG
I know.

JOANNA
Trouble you.

DAZHI TANG
You're welcome.

21, EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-DAY

They arrive one after another, 'high-'five. Margaret asks, Joanna replies. Dazhi Tang leaves, comes back.

DAZHI TANG
Come, try the caramel treats of Minmin's food store that newly opened, low sugar, friable, fragrant, chewy.

MARGARET and JOANNA
Thank you!

Dazhi Tang gives them each a bottle of green tea water,takes his leave.

MARGARET
Had you told him about the thing tomorrow? How didn't he react slightly?

JOANNA
Oh my god, you doubt me. Is my help false?
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SCREEN 8

22, EXT.HARMONY PAVILION-DAY

They run back, 'high-'five.

DAZHI TANG
Now, what food do I buy? Let you have a snack to eliminate hunger?

MARGARET and JOANNA
Dazhi Tang, today is。。。

DAZHI TANG
Oh! I have a rest today, take you to eat buffet.

MARGARET and JOANNA
Good idea, however。。。

DAZHI TANG
Oh! My friends, let's move, be ready to fight, greatly enjoy food!

23,EXT.PARKING LOT-DAY

Margaret pulls Joanna,while walking,whisper. Dazhi Tang claps his hands, opens the trunk. Margaret and Joanna see the cake, the fresh flower, the gift.

MARGARET and JOANNA
Dazhi Tang, you've envisaged so thoughtful.

DAZHI TANG
You overpraised, I only intended to send you a small surprise!

24, EXT.PARKING LOT-DAY

Dazhi Tang opens the package, there's a crystal necklace in the box, asks help from Joanna. Margaret persists, wants him to wear.

DAZHI TANG
(being all nerves)
Hey! Also neck is a woman gender sensitiveness area.

MARGARET
(being free)
Yeah! Don't you just like a beautiful female?

DAZHI TANG
What big missy said is very correct. But don't dare to make rashness casually.

MARGARET
I have a birthday today, then you depressurize, relax.

DAZHI TANG
Don't blame me for attempting affections on your skin.

MARGARET
No real thing, don't care about.

Dazhi Tang shoots a glance. Joanna is peaceful. He finishes soon.
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SCREEN 9

25,INT.IN THE CAR-DAY

Margaret takes Dazhi Tang's arm.

MARGARET
How about the wear? Very bright? Very charming? Very coquettish?

Dazhi Tang asks comment from Joanna.

JOANNA
Yeah!You look like a big star in elegance.

Margaret needs Dazhi Tang's appraisal.

DAZHI TANG
Oh!You're a blooming rose.

Margaret wants to get close to Dazhi Tang.

MARGARET
You're a poet, your words are very beautiful, naturally good at making sensation, I have a bit of dizziness.

DAZHI TANG
(worrying)
Joanna, I'm driving, come on at once, pull her!

In the back seat, Joanna looks outwards.

JOANNA
(frosting)
She's made a show, fiddled a pose, do you take it seriously?

MARGARET
(taking it seriously)
I've sincerely revealed, you don't become a paediatrics!

26,INT.HIBACHI-STYLE GRILLING-NIGHTFALL

Dishes are rich, music sounds, people are numerous. Dazhi Tang and Margaret sit the same chair. Joanna sits opposite.

MARGARET
Can I ask you some questions? Or for ramble.

DAZHI TANG
The birthday girl has her privilege. Make yourself at home.

MARGARET
OK!There's a lot of female in casino, why haven't you found one?

DAZHI TANG
Alas! Selecting girlfriend is an engineering, mustn't be casual.

MARGARET
(sounding out)
No one noticed you?

DAZHI TANG
(being dispassionate)
Things weren't so certainly!

JOANNA
(echoing)
I believe there's a good many.

27,INT.HIBACHI-STYLE GRILLING-EVENING

Margaret takes back two plates of food.

MARGARET
Continue with our topic. What people have you met?

DAZHI TANG
Young European female, Hispanic female, African female, Asian female, Chinese female.

MARGARET
Surely it doesn't mean that they're very beautiful?

JOANNA
Ah! There're beauties anywhere.

DAZHI TANG
Many of them are glamorous.

MARGARET
Why have you still been a single man?

DAZHI TANG
Several sexy creatures look like you thus.But all of them are passive smoking. Even over half is heavy smokers.

Dazhi Tang shrugs his shoulders,gets up,retrieves food.

DAZHI TANG(CONT’D)
Although meeting every day, have a good impression on each other, however very helpless it is. That's to say you can be concerned for something, but you can’t get anything. So in addition to nod, still salute with eyes.

MARGARET
Ah! Your meaning is very clear, if I were your girlfriend, I would have no choice but to quit smoking.

Joanna lowers her head, scrawls the desktop, her fingers tremble.
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