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Old 03-13-2017, 08:38 PM   #1
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Anyone Willing to Critique the 1st 22 pages of my Sci-fi drama/thriller feature?

Hey everyone! I was just wondering if anyone would be interested in giving their honest feedback on the first 22 pages of my Sci-fi drama/thriller feature? I sort of wrote it on a whim, even though I've been pondering on it for a while. Here's the link: https://www.celtx.com/auth/public/resource/l9bz9c7y

Let me know what you think. Is it grabbing or too dry?

Thanks and looking forward to your responses, good or bad!
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Hey,
I just read your 22 pages. I really like it. I couldn't stop reading it. I do have a few suggestions for improvement. Story wise I can't give suggestions because I don't know where this is all heading towards.
Also, I don't know if you'd consider a collaboration. I would love to help write it.
If not, it's okay. I can still give you the feedback of what I thought.

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Old 03-19-2017, 10:16 PM   #3
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Hey,
I just read your 22 pages. I really like it. I couldn't stop reading it. I do have a few suggestions for improvement. Story wise I can't give suggestions because I don't know where this is all heading towards.
Also, I don't know if you'd consider a collaboration. I would love to help write it.
If not, it's okay. I can still give you the feedback of what I thought.

Flip
Hey thanks for taking the time to read it. Respectfully, I'm going to have to decline on collaborating as I'm working with my brother on this project, but I'd love to check out some of your work and if our styles align, I might be interested in doing some collaboration.

Regarding your suggestions, please by all means let me know what your thoughts are. I'd love to hear them.

Thanks!
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