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Can you use this technique in a screenplay?

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victortiti89

If, for instance, you want to describe something instead of telling through dialogue, can you write a scene about it and the audience would assume this is what the character is telling? For instance, can you write things like: " His words paint the image of a huge castle" or " His words weave the image of a slaughter scene. Soldiers fight each-other, etc."?
Example:
A) STORYTELLER
The castle is big. It was three towers. It has
a bridge and thick walls. It has a gate three times
larger than a man.
versus this:
A) The storyteller's words depict a huge castle. It has three towers. Its bridge is impressive and its walls are thick. Its gate is three times the size of a human.
or
B) WARRIOR
The soldier then slew the first enemy. Then, he charged
into combat against two more enemies. He defeated them
both.
versus:
B) The soldier slays his first enemy. He charges against two more. He uses his weapons to decimate them.
I know this isn't good if the dialogue is short, but could it work to replace a very long dialogue-based scene which describes past or current events or describes certain locations in detail? Thanks for taking your time to read and answer this!:)
 
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Are you going to direct/produce this or is this for a spec script you'll be placing on the market for someone else to pay for production of?

If you're the writer/director/producer then it's fine.

If this is for a spec screenplay to place on the market competing with other screenplays then "No", it's far from fine.



In the castle scene does the audience see the castle or see STORY TELLER describing it?

In the warrior scene does the audience see the warrior slaying enemies or see WARRIOR describing the it?



In both cases the former is written in the action lines...

Code: 
The storyteller gestures a huge castle with three towers, an impressive 
bridge, thick walls, and a gate three times the size of a man.

Code: 
The soldier slays his first enemy, charges against two more, then 
decimates them with his weapons.

... the latter in dialog lines.

Code: 
			STORYTELLER
		The castle is big. It was 
		three towers. It has a bridge 
		and thick walls. It has a 
		gate three times larger than 
		a man.

Code: 
			WARRIOR
		The soldier then slew the first 
		enemy. Then he charged into 
		combat against two more enemies. 
		He defeated them both.
 
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