Horror screenplay available for option or sell

TITLE: A Ghostly Presence
GENRE: Horror, Paranormal Triller
LENGTH: 126 pages
LOGLINE: A county sheriff has to protect his small town community against an ancien evil that has come out of its lying dormant state and took a group of teeenagers for target. There will be an interresting triple connection.

MAIN CHARACTERS:

County Sheriff Lance Delvecchio, 42. Tall, effortlessly fit and Solid. Sympathetic grin permanently attached to his clever face. Carries himself with a tremendous charismatic entensity. It is impossible not to like him.

His wife Lisbeth Delvecchio, 37. High School teacher. Piercing eyes, almost magnetic. Her appearance is breathtakingly seductive, charming and confident.

High School student. Bryna Forenz, 17-years-old. Modestly pretty. Innocence beauty. Shinning glint into her eyes.


CONTACT: Steph-025@hotmail.com

Determination is in front instead of talent in most of the achievements. I have both.

Welcome back Stephane.

I’m glad you took some of the advice from your last post and added
some info on the script. You logline needs some work. Even if you
just dropped the second sentence it would help.

Your character descriptions might be fine when casting, but they
are not needed when trying to sell a script. I am left wondering
if “piercing eyes” and “shining glint” are so essential to your
STORY that if an actor was cast without them would the story
itself falter.

At this stage you are trying to build interest in the story - not
in the build and eyes of the actors you would like to see in the
movie.

A serious, if seemingly pedantic, question:

What if a producer and director found an excellent actor who isn’t
tall and effortlessly fit to play the Sheriff. Would that change
your STORY?

With a little more work and a better understanding of the business
you can develop a fine pitch for your script. Where else have you
tried to see this?

Thanks. I took notes. What about this instead?

TITLE: A Ghostly Presence
GENRE: Horror, Paranormal Triller
LENGTH: 126 pages
LOGLINE: The stillness of a small town in Vermont is about to tramatically change when an Evil Force is being unleashed from its underground prison and a group of teenagers becomes the prime target while the county sheriff is doing more than his duty to keep the community safe.

MAIN CHARACTERS:

County Sheriff Lance Delvecchio, 42. Fit and Solid. Sympathetic grin permanently attached to his clever face. Carries himself with a tremendous charismatic entensity. It is impossible not to like him.

His wife Lisbeth Delvecchio, 37. High School teacher. Her appearance is breathtakingly seductive and confident.

High School student. Bryna Forenz, 17-years-old. Modestly pretty. Innocence beauty.


CONTACT: Steph-025@hotmail.com

Apparently too bloody for producers

TITLE: A Ghostly Presence
GENRE: Horror
LENGTH: 126 pages
LOGLINE: The stillness of a small town in Vermont is about to tramatically change when an Evil Force is being unleashed from its underground prison and a group of teenagers becomes the prime target while the county sheriff is doing more than his duty to keep the community safe.


CONTACT: Steph-025@hotmail.com