watch Coffee And Cigarettes: Love?

THE FILM: https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=1KcdhOaLYVU

Here's my new short film based upon the film Coffee and Cigarettes. This is entitled "Love?"I hope you guys enjoy it and huge thanks to Aidan Zieres who helped me with all of this and did an amazing job on the Edit! If you find this funny or thought provoking in any way share it with a friend, thanks

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Directed and Written by: Strider Moore
Dedicated to: Em Robinson
Cinematography By: Strider Moore & Aidan Zieres
Edited by: Aidan Zieres
filmed with, Canon 60D, Canon T3i, GoPro3 Silver, iPhone 6S
Edited with Adobe Premiere

I stopped about 5 mins in. The dialogue failed to pull me in.

It looked okay. We saw a lot of the guy on the left. Would have been nice to see some reaction shots.

The main problem is the dialogue. Too many "ums." I don't know if this was scripted, or ad lib. Either way, it didn't flow well.

Two of my fav are Tarantino: Reservoir Dogs opening scene, Death Proof diner scene. And there's the diner scene from the Big Labowski.

Those convos grab you real quick. Even if they taper off, they've hooked you.