watch My Directorial Debut-Please take a look

Hi guys,

I made a short film last year, and it was the first dialogue-script i'd written.

I would appreciate any feedback and opinions from the film, and the writing of the film.

http://www.vimeo.com/19139620

Many thanks,

Ewan.

Not bad man. I really liked the popping color, and the music at the end.

I liked the look of it a lot. The uncle did a great job. But I think editing and story-wise it could have been a lot shorter and could have used some more coverage (more cuts to different angles etc). I think the idea was cute and I liked the end, but it have enough of a story to go on that long. IMHO.

But it definitely was pretty enough to keep watching till the end. It somehow reminded me of that Roald Dahl (sp?) book Danny the Champion of the World, or at least the way I envisioned the place where they lived.

What's the story with the ice cream truck?

For a first effort it was excellent. It looked great. But, the acting was eh. That's seriously what you have to watch. You get the acting on target, and you're more then halfway home.

The guitar duel was cool.

Was this shot at Stoke-On-Trent? I was there years ago to see Carbon Silicon (Mick Jones of the Clash & Tony James Generation X). I loved that town. I even bought plates. It was FREEZING. There was snow, and all the young girls were out late in skirts and no jackets. It was freaky.