This is a scene that I wrote about two or three months ago. The one I would say about it is that the pacing is too fast. I probably should've slowed it down a bit.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ooFfLhHMMTzrQ_4g7aHT_UMVsy9aL9QV/view?usp=sharing
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ooFfLhHMMTzrQ_4g7aHT_UMVsy9aL9QV/view?usp=sharing