Tagline (Map to the Stars)

mlesemann

Staff Member

Moderator

• Oct 25, 2016

• #2

I'd cut the word "sentient" - I don't think you need it & most people (unfortunately) won't understand it. But otherwise I like it!

 

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alex ma whitmer

• Oct 26, 2016

• #3

For the record that is a LOGLINE, not a TAGLINE

And it not a good one. Keep working on it.


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mikemintzdj

• Oct 26, 2016

• #4

What is not good about it?

 

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