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Old 09-18-2017, 02:36 PM   #1
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A New Sketch! Please Give Feedback

Hey Everyone,

After listening to all your helpful comments, my friend and I got to work, and put together a second sketch for our channel, We'd love it if you checked it out, and told us what you think?



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Old 09-18-2017, 03:04 PM   #2
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Lol, you searched a dictionary for hot and found a picture of someone? Classic.
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Old 09-18-2017, 03:28 PM   #3
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F**K that's funny, 2 for 2!
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Old 09-18-2017, 03:32 PM   #4
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Thanks! Glad you're liking them. Not to be that person, but if you find 'em funny sharing it around with some other people who might enjoy them, would be more helpful than you know.
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Old 09-18-2017, 04:36 PM   #5
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You've got to do something about the plain white wall behind the couch.
nothing screams unprofessional like a blank white wall (it's one of the reasons you see wallpaper so frequently in hollywood films)

funny stuff
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Old 09-18-2017, 04:48 PM   #6
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"Gotta dip, see ya later"

What regional vernacular is this? Or did I hear it wrong?

Keep up the good work! I could see this developing into a cool little underground series. The more you do, the better they will get.
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That sounds American to me. Preferably ghetto.
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Old 09-18-2017, 04:57 PM   #8
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Lol no.

However must be a west coast saying, no one here says "gotta dip."
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Old 09-18-2017, 05:04 PM   #9
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Not bad. Keep at it, and watch the audio levels... the music
seemed a bit loud, unless it's meant to be that way.
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Old 09-18-2017, 05:27 PM   #10
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Thanks for all the feedback, we're both from Northern California if you were still wondering
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Old 09-19-2017, 12:25 PM   #11
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Good writing, and I love how detailed you were on some of the props and set design. I agree with sfoster that the white wall needs to be broken up. I'd also pull the couch off the wall a bit. Add some physical depth (which would also allow for some easier set dressing back there).

Strange disparity between camera perspective between first and second shots. The 2-shot is just a tad too low, but then the 1-shot is looking slightly down. It's... weird. Find a happy medium. The camera doesn't need to come up much at all on the 2-shot, but the 1-shot needs to come down to match it.

Sound, dude. You gotta work on the sound. The camera mic stuff is distracting. Believe it or not, visuals that are a little rough around the edges will be perceived as worse with bad sound, but perceived as passable if the sound is on point. It'll also make edits not seem as abrupt.
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Old 09-19-2017, 01:09 PM   #12
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Ditto. Sound is what separates "productions" from "home videos." This is roomy and sounds like you used in-camera sound, like on someone's home movie. In a production we want that pro sound. Image is always manipulated and stylized, so even poor video is forgiven when it is coupled with pro sound. It also holds a perceived value, meaning, when you hear good sound, you unconsciously value it a more professional production, but poor sound spells amateur and takes you out of it.
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Old 09-19-2017, 03:21 PM   #13
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Thanks for all the feedback, sound is always something that makes me nervous, cause I agree that it's actually way more important in terms of professionalism than visuals. The human mind is much more aware of discrepencies in sound than it is in images. I'm looking at upgrading from my low quality shotgun mic to some lav mics, so I can be sure to capture consistent quality dialogue. Any suggestions from more expreinced sound people?
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Old 09-19-2017, 03:24 PM   #14
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Even though you used a shotgun it sounded roomy meaning the sound was bouncing of the back wall, if you took the suggestions of fixing up the plain white wall you can also deaden and soften the sound at the same time. But I'll let the pros chime in.
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Old 09-19-2017, 03:38 PM   #15
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how far away was your mic
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