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watch My first short films

Hey guys, I'm looking to get feedback on my first two short films. So far they've gotten pretty good responses but theres plenty for me to improve on, I'm sure. I appreciate compliments as well as criticism but please keep the criticism constructive...I'm fragile. Not really though, say what you feel so I can actually make my next film better. Hope you guys enjoy, there are also movie reviews and short comedy skits
On the page as well.

http://youtu.be/Pi1sQ-3EZ5E

http://youtu.be/8poSeYhlJgA
 
Home of the Brave

Would have like to see the guy be more animated as he ran the hobo out of the shed. More angry/hostile.

Don't most panhandlers pick a busy street to be on. This looks like he's at the back of a shop, but maybe that"s due to permits and what not.
 
Thanks for the comments. Home of the brave was my first short and in the city I live
In people make it very difficult to shoot with them around, for instance the other day I was filming and these middle aged people stopped in the middle of the road to scream random curse words which ruined the take, and shortly after that I guy told me I should take a picture
Of his(take a guess)and then got aggressive to the point we had to wait for him to leave before things got worse and we could film again lol. The guy who shooed him out at the beginning was working(he helps me with a lot of the filming)so we were short on time and felt it looked good enough but looking back on it he could have been more animated to really sell it. With moments I wanted to build on the family for a bit before getting to the end.
 
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