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Old 01-11-2017, 02:00 PM   #31
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Nobody did you say you did software?

Has anyone ever come up to you with an idea for a piece of software to start a business.
they'll say... I provided the idea!! Now you put in 800 hours of work and we'll split it 50/50!

Would you take someone up on that offer? Someone who didn't put any real effort into it themselves?

This is kinda what it's like when you pitch a script that you wrote once and think it's done. Scripts need to be written and rewritten and rewritten. A lot of effort needs to be made. You cannot just spit something out and expect someone to dedicate the amount of time and money it takes to turn it into a film.

Kind of like showing up to a job interview with no shoes, shorts and a sleeveless shirt.
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Old 01-11-2017, 06:03 PM   #32
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I usually like wordy films, though know most make short non-talkative.
I like wordy films, too. Great dialogue, strong banter, thoughtful
themes can make a terrific short film. In this case you have offered
a monologue. And one in voice over. The visual is a woman sitting
and thinking. Not to my liking so I don't want to spend my money
making it. I would make this for you if I didn't have to pay out of
pocket.

It seems simple enough for YOU to make. Have you considered that
option?
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Old 01-11-2017, 06:13 PM   #33
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I like wordy films, too. Great dialogue, strong banter, thoughtful
themes can make a terrific short film. In this case you have offered
a monologue. And one in voice over. The visual is a woman sitting
and thinking. Not to my liking so I don't want to spend my money
making it. I would make this for you if I didn't have to pay out of
pocket.

It seems simple enough for YOU to make. Have you considered that
option?
I understand it, but I am not a film director, can't do it. I never did it and even don't have enough expertise and facilities for it.
I come up with a better script. I changed some, for being costly. For example, the script which was about a film making lover who wanted to make his grandma's stories into film. People said it is costly, as it was outdoor and with some people. So, I think I need a new thing.


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Old 01-11-2017, 06:30 PM   #34
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You need to reword your proposal then, basically you are looking to have your film made, as a writer, so in essence, you are offering a free script to someone that will produce it.

A little different than looking for someone to make your film (you as acting Producer).

Free script! (relinquish any creative control)...
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Old 01-11-2017, 06:58 PM   #35
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I understand it, but I am not a film director, can't do it. I never did it and even don't have enough expertise and facilities for it.
This could be a good project to start learning with. Shoot in on your phone even if you don't have a camera.
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This could be a good project to start learning with. Shoot in on your phone even if you don't have a camera.
Then I should write something in Persian, I am in Iran, and have no dog, too..


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I am writing about a Fugitive who hid in a home soldiers looking for him, good?


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Old 01-12-2017, 08:42 AM   #38
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celtx format,
Directorik is referring to the proper structure for formatting a screenplay not the software.
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Old 01-12-2017, 11:34 AM   #39
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I am writing about a Fugitive who hid in a home soldiers looking for him, good?
You have good ideas. What you need to do is learn the screenplay
format.

Do you have access to watching episodes of "Twilight Zone"? If
you do watch 12 episodes. There are many that take place in one
or two locations with three to five characters.

Look AT THIS LINK. It's an old format that includes camera angles
but if you study it it should help you understand format.
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I don't understand what INT. and EXT. mean. I thought celtix software is for formatting script and I tried to use it for this reason. It seems still I have problem. True?

Do I miss only camera (SHOT)?


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Int = Interior
It means that your scene takes place inside. The rest of the slug line should tell what that location is (briefly).
Ext = Exterior
Your scene takes place outside. The rest of the slug line tells where outside it is.
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Old 01-14-2017, 10:49 AM   #42
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There are five main elements of a properly formatted script

Scene Heading/Slugline
Action
Character Name
Dialogue
Parenthetical


Sluglines or Scene Heading
Written in capitals and containing three pieces of information: (1) Where; (2) Exactly where
(3) when. (2) and (3) are separated by a space or a dash, followed by another space.

(1) can be INT. (interior) or EXT. (exterior); (2) is a short identification of the place; and
(3) can be either DAY or NIGHT.

For example:

INT. AIRPORT - DAY

You can use more than one subject.

For example:

INT. AIRPORT - TICKET COUNTER - DAY
INT. AIRPORT/TICKET COUNTER - DAY

You need a new slugline each time you change the place, and/or change the time.

Action, or Description
The screenplay’s visual elements, where we show what is taking place on the screen.
Character descriptions, what they are doing, the places, and everything the audience will
need to assimilate visually. Don’t use capitals for sounds, props, visuals or emphasis. But
you will capitalize the name of each character the first time you introduce them.

Character Name
In a properly formatted script the Character name is placed above the dialogue, in caps
appx. 25 spaces from the left margin; not centered

Dialogue
This is where you place everything the character says.

Parenthetical
Do not use parantheticals under the character name to show action. And don’t use them
to tell the actor how to read the line. Let the emotion come from your script and dialogue.
Try to avoid using them at all.
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Old 01-15-2017, 05:59 AM   #43
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Very informative, thanks!!


What if I write a short film who has only two actors and a remotely controlled toy car? I can write this, but fear about script format. If in open real locations it is problem, I mean in crowded places, I write it differently. I think for example it is nice to put one nice library beside a toy car. It can have many meanings. Just an idea to share with you and here you choose.


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Old 01-15-2017, 10:49 AM   #44
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Your challenge now is to practice screenplay format. You already have a
lot of stories you want to tell. What you need to learn is how to write
those stories in screenplay format.

Write the story about the old woman and her dog in screenplay format.
Write the story of the fugitive in screenplay format.
Write the story about the two people and the remote controlled car in
screenplay format.
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Old 01-16-2017, 02:35 AM   #45
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Your challenge now is to practice screenplay format. You already have a
lot of stories you want to tell. What you need to learn is how to write
those stories in screenplay format.

Write the story about the old woman and her dog in screenplay format.
Write the story of the fugitive in screenplay format.
Write the story about the two people and the remote controlled car in
screenplay format.

Don't you think I better put my time on one real feature movie instead?
I had two feature films ideas...


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