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Old 12-31-2016, 05:58 PM   #1
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Can one edit and make/direct my very short film?

It is a criminal, and I tried to write it to be short and easy to make.. It is not still in script format and also it is not in proper English. Can anyone help?



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Old 12-31-2016, 08:15 PM   #2
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Can one edit and make/direct my very short film
It's both possible and a very good idea. It'll teach you a lot.

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I'm sure if you offer enough money as an incentive, I'm sure you'll get all the help you need.
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Old 12-31-2016, 08:18 PM   #3
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It's both possible and a very good idea. It'll teach you a lot.



I'm sure if you offer enough money as an incentive, I'm sure you'll get all the help you need.

You mean you get money for it? It is just a bit more than two pages docx.


No one free? It is a little project..


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Old 12-31-2016, 11:37 PM   #4
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You mean you get money for it?
Yep. That's what I mean. Not for me specifically. I don't do the kind of scut work you're asking.

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No one free? It is a little project..
There's free and there's free. One means available. I'm sure many are available. It's just a matter of you providing an incentive for them to drop their own projects, putting aside work, time with their family/friends to spend time on your project.. Money is a good incentive to get the scut work done that you're either incapable or unwilling to do. If you cannot offer money, what else is their incentive?
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Old 01-03-2017, 12:57 PM   #5
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It is a criminal, and I tried to write it to be short and easy to make.. It is not still in script format and also it is not in proper English. Can anyone help?
I'll look at the script.

Making a short film (even two pages) costs money. Even if it's
one day of shooting the actors and crew need something for
their time - even it's just a couple of meals.
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Old 01-03-2017, 04:19 PM   #6
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I'll look at the script.

Making a short film (even two pages) costs money. Even if it's
one day of shooting the actors and crew need something for
their time - even it's just a couple of meals.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0Bx...W8wd09zYXhGNHc
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Are you offering the story for free to filmmakers for the writing credit?

That's the gist I get from the first post. And probably the best way to see it made, since you aren't interested in directing or editing it.
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I know you know it, but that is a mess. and it's not because of your
lack of English proficiency. I was thinking I could format it and clean
up any language issues, but I don't even understand the first few
paragraphs.

How about this:

Look at THIS LINK and try your script again. Take your
first 15 sentences and:

Write down the location as in that example.
Write down what we will see on the screen.
When the location changes, write that change just like in the example.

Don't worry about proper English, just put it in proper format.
don't do the dialogue, just the action.

Okay?
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Old 01-03-2017, 10:49 PM   #9
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Yes, this is for writing credit.


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https://drive.google.com/open?id=0Bx...m93eHp5RTR1V0E



I edited and is now script format.


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Old 01-03-2017, 11:52 PM   #10
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Locations:

Airport with payphone ( ??? do pay phones even exist still ???)
Two Busy Public Streets
Driving a Car
Interrogation Room
Bedroom
Jail
Big River with Adjacent Parking
Train

This is extremely complicated for a short film. Way way way too complicated for something you don't want to pay money for.
This will be expensive and very time consuming for such a short script.

You also have a large cast... man. man1. man2. woman. woman. boy. one of men. one of men.
Plus all the background extras...

No one is going to make this for free. It costs too much money.
Worst of all I don't understand the story.

I read it and I don't know what the point is and don't connect with any of the characters.
What does this story mean to you? What are you trying to communicate to the audience
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Old 01-04-2017, 12:47 AM   #11
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I could not put a long story in it. That's about some little robbers who will rob some big transgressors bag (like smugglers bag) and will cause one killed and another had more chance to live in jail.
In fact, I could not put every details in, so, the audience will understand it from guessing in the little show.
I don't know how to write something well which is cheap as well. It is the problem, maybe??




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I don't know how to write something well which is cheap as well. It is the problem, maybe??
Yes writing well and writing something that is cheap to produce are the two most important aspects of a script for an indie short film maker
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Old 01-04-2017, 01:54 AM   #13
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Very expensive to shoot - as sfoster said. That's a lot of locations for
3 pages.

How about trying a story with one location and no more than four
people? My first short film was two girls daring a boy to walk up
to a spooky house, right the doorbell and run. Four pages, one
location. My second short film was one man inside a closet and
there is something outside.
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Very expensive to shoot - as sfoster said. That's a lot of locations for
3 pages.

How about trying a story with one location and no more than four
people? My first short film was two girls daring a boy to walk up
to a spooky house, right the doorbell and run. Four pages, one
location. My second short film was one man inside a closet and
there is something outside.
OK, what about this one? I didn't make it in script format yet, but this needs a dog, and an old couple.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0Bx...TlCTWhoZWN6WlE


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Dogs are hard to direct. Just like babies/kids.

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