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Old 01-04-2017, 09:40 PM   #31
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One thing WalterB said is, you often hear your own dialog differently because you are familiar.
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You're also deeply familiar with both the script and the recorded footage and sound, so you already know the lines.
Freddy, here's what I suggest, because her audio is terrible and it needs to be addressed for the finished short: go back into the edit of this trailer and mute the music. Listen carefully to both actors. Close your eyes and listen. His audio is clear and up-front, with not too much of the "room" beneath his dialog. Hers sounds like she's in a bathroom... it's all "room" and no direct sound.

You say they were both wearing lavs, so where is that audio for her? It sounds like we're hearing her audio either from a camera mic or from the other lav, but it is clearly not from her lav. This may just be an oversight of the edit... her track was accidentally left out, unintentionally lowered or muted, whatever. It sounds bad, and if the audio from her lav indeed exists, it's an easy problem to fix.

It also sounds very much like the keys dropping on the table, and the purse dropping on the table, are production audio or even scratch (camera mic) audio. I'd replace those with SFX or Foley.
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Sorry AcousticAl!!!!!
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Old 01-05-2017, 11:29 AM   #33
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It's not Hollywood quality but I did my damnedest.
No one is expecting Hollywood quality, Freddy. And we all really want to help.
It's frustrating to be called elitist and read your sarcastic comments when I
see people helping you. Or trying to help.

I can tell from your trailer how hard you worked because I, too, was a first
time filmmaker. I hope that someday you will see that each person who
commented here only wants to see you succeed. Even me.

We really ARE rooting for you. All of us. Don't dig in and dismiss comments:
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I can hear the dialog clearly over the phone so i can't take that critique seriously. It's finished now.
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The sound is not an issue.
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Old 02-02-2017, 01:56 PM   #34
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Cool, everyone. The last page is more of the advice I needed. I love the imagery but the sound is the weakness in regards to the whole film. I still submitted to a few festivals as is but if I get any selections, I'll tweak it some more. I submitted to Hollyshorts, Miami Short Film Fest and Central Florida Film Festival so far.
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Old 02-02-2017, 03:17 PM   #35
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What has been said above holds validity. It is difficult to hear what is being said. I was able to make out what was being said, I just had to strain a bit to hear it. You'll find the suggestion of raising the volume a worthy note. It is tough to tell what the story is about exactly, although the title cards do help. Often I'll go back and try to get to the bare bones of the story and find the simplest way of conveying that message. Even having character flat out saying their motivation at times. Trailers sell your film, therefore withholding too much information from those you are selling to can harm you.





Wow! This looks so incredibly pro. Not just the footage but the whole composition. What I would do to get to score something like this. Mmmm mmm mmm... ;-)


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Wow! This looks so incredibly pro. Not just the footage but the whole composition. What I would do to get to score something like this. Mmmm mmm mmm... ;-)


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Woah.. hold the phone! That came out a bit slutty. I mean.. well you know what I mean.


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Old 02-02-2017, 03:40 PM   #37
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Wow! This looks so incredibly pro. Not just the footage but the whole composition. What I would do to get to score something like this. Mmmm mmm mmm... ;-)


Woah.. hold the phone! That came out a bit slutty. I mean.. well you know what I mean.


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Old 02-04-2017, 07:53 PM   #38
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Any news on this film Freddy?
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Old 02-06-2017, 08:30 AM   #39
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The sound could be better, focus on making sure the sound is the best you can possibly get it to be. Always have that one or two persons who are on set and have nothing to do but focus on the quality of the sound. Hope this helps and well done on making it.
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